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Ash..!!
21-4-2010, 03:26 AM
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته!

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etoo, it's my first try in English and here! k
so .. hope you'll like it ! ^^" n




he destroyed your life
colored it with blank! k
he brought pain for it! k
and left you with painful memories
tears tears tears ! k
makes tearful heart .. it's drown in ! k
hopeless.. and believe-less! k
it's suffering.. a cruel suffering .. k
need for a light any light even
if it will disappear.. it doesn't matter! k
just want a light! k
any thing to help you .. to contain you ! k
take you away.. help you to leave all pains! k
and to live away away from it.. k
your mind says: k
what a cruel life it is!! k
what a cruel person is he!! k
never forgive
never never ..! k
.... but .. k
with all of those memories he left .. k
deep in your heart you don't hate him! k
how come!? k
can't hate anybody.. k
that's fine.. k
but that person was on top of
every thing .. every every thing! k
you really wanna hate him! k
for nothing but because
........... he deserves ! k
.................. he deserves ! k
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I believe that sometimes we need to hate someone
not because we want.. no because he deserves ! k





and after all suffering .. k
a heart came empty from negative
emotions with lot of positive ones ! k
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I LOVE JORDAN
21-4-2010, 09:41 AM
you know , i remember someone said that a white heart can't hate anybody

whatever the pain was caused by him

you have this white heart so it cant be a hateful ,,,

but anyway you are right ,,, many people overcome us...

and when we want to revenge,, our morals ( or our deep emotions ) dont allow us to ...





I believe that sometimes we need to hate someone
not because we want.. no because he deserves !


believe that the one who make you suffer is the one who deserves nothing,

just to ignore him, that is will be good

for me , when i feel sad and disappointed i just read my signature and my perception to life change completely

i feel your words( maybe ) ,,, that why i wrote so much ,,,

thanks a lot for your topic,,, a painful topic,,, i really like it
((k.r.h) what are these white letters, are they refer to something? ^^ just kidding )

C ___ U

mohbaboo
21-4-2010, 05:30 PM
وعليكم السلام


It's really a great first try for you. I believe with more practice, you can be an amazing English writer. You just need more practice and have more stuff to read and see how things are usually expressed.l

I think that when you write, most of people do, you think about your sentences in Arabic and write accordingly, and the best way to write is not to do that and believe with more learning and writing, you will master it.l

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he destroyed your life
colored it with blank! k
he brought pain for it! k
and left you with painful memories
that's really an awful experience for someone to go through. To be betrayed by the one you love and adore.l


I believe that sometimes we need to hate someone
not because we want.. no because he deserves
I believe that, too. Sometimes, even we try to forgive or to forget but the one who hurt us might hurt others, then it's a must we hate and try to prevent such things to happen again.l

last thing
you wrote at the end (from negative) and (a lot of positive)l
such adjectives as (positive-negative) are supposed to be followed by nouns or should be replaced by noun forms of the same word like:l

1. from negative ideas
2. from negativity

1. a lot of positive things
2. a lot of positivity

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thank you and keep writing
we really need to read such emotional stuff ^_^l

good luck

Schwert
22-4-2010, 04:46 PM
Peace be upon you too sis Ash
I really liked this topic and it's brilliant somehow, ur words are beautiful, expressive and systimatic and u will be better little by little if u continue writting like this, we wait more from ur creativity sis in the next time, thanks for ur effort in this topic and go on, cya

M!ss_KeKo
22-4-2010, 07:25 PM
It is strange that hate change hearts After great suffering


will find any person, even if the heart was hatred go


bye00The heart of the person will change

Ash..!!
23-4-2010, 01:27 AM
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Jordan chan ^^ k
welcome sweetie .. k
That one was right but I don't think
that I have a white heart! ^^" k
and when we want to revenge,, our morals ( or our deep emotions ) dont allow us to ...
yes .. k
but i guess it's not our morals no
I think the second.. our deep emotions..! k
it prevent us .. like I still have a deep
emotions for that person prevent me ..! k
maybe you are right dear.. this type of ppl
deserves nothing! k
but I still wanna hate him..! k
because the worse is hating and I want
him deserves the worse! k
i feel your words( maybe ) ,,, that why i wrote so much ,,,
umm I wrote it by my emotions that's why
u felt it! :p k
The thank is for you sweetie!
i really liked your replay ! ^^ k

( and what is this beautiful replay, if it
refer to something.. it'll be your kind heart ;p ) k
c ya :] k
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Mohababoo Sensei k
I am so glad to see a replay like yours ..! k
it encouraged me a lot ! ^^ k
thank you so much ..! k
etoo.. k
It's difficult because I have an Arabic mind ^^".. k
but I'll never give up..! k
I'll do my best and keep writing till I master
it..! ^^ k

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that's really an awful experience for someone to go through. To be betrayed by the one you love and adore.l

yes, that's right .. k
I wounder .. k
is the berrying easy for that type of ppl !? k
doing things without any responsibility! k
and leave just for destroy the other who
gives them the heart with honest love..! k

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I believe that, too. Sometimes, even we try to forgive or to forget but the one who hurt us might hurt others, then it's a must we hate and try to prevent such things to happen again.l

a good point ..! k
and .. the disloyal still a disloyal forever!! k
am sure it'll reflex on his life one day ..! k

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thanks for your advices .. k
they were helpful
I have corrected many mistakes ! :] k

.. i was shy before.. but now it's okay
because from our mistakes we learn! k
thank you for being here! ^^ k
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Anno.Sola
23-4-2010, 02:14 AM
وَعَليْكُمْ السَّلَامْ وَرَحْمَةُ اللهْ وَبَرَكَاتُه }} ..




Hello Sweetie Ash

You Know, I will just Speak By A Free Way =) .. h

Past and Present , Future And Past

it Just words, But each one Has Some Thing inside ..d

a past with a memory, a Future with a dream

A Dream With a Present ! s

You Need To walk, Step By Step

with a Dream you want make

a Place You want Fly in .. g

You have Wings, So use it ! s

Try To Start " Taking Of "d

and We will Bw with ya

Good Luck =) h

Ash..!!
26-4-2010, 04:11 AM
Saber :] c
thank you a lot for your nice words! c
and your encouraging! ^^ c
I'll do my best ! c
thanks again!c
be safe ! :] c

Keko chan! c
welcome sweet! ^^ c
the hating didn't change the heart
it can't hate ..c
it's the suffering size ..c
whose change it and leave it
without a lot of its positive and
negative emotions ! :\ c
be safe dear! :] c

Anno.sola
hello dear ^^ c
nice words Anno .. c
maybe I need for a real dream!
and a new place ! c
wings !? c
I hope I can feel it soon
I wanna fly far away !c
and throw every thing
fly to my life to find it and
live it! c
love u sweetie! :] c


after all.. I really can't
feel that there's something deserves even him! c
and can't change my inside!
no caring ! c

M!ss_KeKo
26-4-2010, 04:44 AM
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH..!!!!!
beautiful Girl ^>^
lHow is it going
Feelings no one believes that the truth is that there is confidence Will be close But it is still exist ..!