A story by my little sister

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    الصورة الرمزية محبة الربيع

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    افتراضي A story by my little sister

    :: Hello every one ::



    ?How are you doing these days



    hopefully after a long journey I've returned to MSOMS



    my subject today is about a story written by my younger sister who is 9 years old


    well there have been some mistakes and I corrected for her but I asked her


    first what she meant when she wrote it so that I won't change her opinion



    Now read the story and enjoy



    Noof and Teddy Bear





    Once upon a time there was a girl called "Noof" who had a teddy bear called "Meme".

    Everyday Noof goes to school by bus and one day she sat on the chair of the bus,

    opened her bag and she saw a red paper written on it




    "I love you so much Noof!

    Don't go to school today because it will be dangerous for you."


    From: your teddy bear Meme


    After finishing reading the letter, Noof felt scared and told her friend as soon as

    she arrived at school saying to her: "Can you help me?" , her friend replied: "okay!

    But, about what?" She then said: "My teddy bear wrote in a paper that there will be

    danger for me". Her friend said: "Okay! Okay! I will help you Noof but where is the place?"

    Noof said: "I don't know! I don't know!" her friend said: "okay then we will go around

    the school". Then they go to see what the problem is, they went to their teacher's

    office and found her dead. They saw her foot and legs were cut and covered with

    blood. Then they continue across the long hallway until they saw a man his face

    covered with blood

    holding a scissors on his hand. As soon as the man saw Noof he said:" I will kill her

    now!" then Noof took a big wood, throw it on the man that make him die and she went

    with her friend to home. She slept with her teddy bear Meme next to her.



    hope you like it " class="inlineimg" />
    التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة محبة الربيع ; 2-6-2010 الساعة 04:36 PM

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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    Hello sister محبة الربيع
    nice simple story you feel the innocence of children inside it
    I ask Allah to safe her for her self, for her parents and for her sister
    .and become a perfect writer in the future

    and thanks for you for encouraging her


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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

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    Hello sister محبة الربيع

    nice simple story you feel the innocence of children inside it
    I ask Allah to safe her for her self, for her parents and for her sister
    .and become a perfect writer in the future

    and thanks for you for encouraging her



    Hi my dear friend Nice Nurse


    yep indeed and it shows her deep fears and thought about the unknown


    and I ask Allah to guard us all under his protection


    thanks sweety for the nice reply



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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    honestly!!! i dont get the moral of this sweet story
    i guess ur sister has dreamed about death recently or she saw something afraid in reallity or she is angry about the wars around her. anyway thats a nice story in english for a 9-year-old girl

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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة M.A.T مشاهدة المشاركة
    honestly!!! i dont get the moral of this sweet story
    i guess ur sister has dreamed about death recently or she saw something afraid in reallity or she is angry about the wars around her. anyway thats a nice story in english for a 9-year-old girl

    not every story must have a moral lesson

    because some can be just for entertaining the reader


    but when a child write it shows unconsiously thier inner feelings

    and hidden fears


    &


    Thanks alot for sharing your opinion " class="inlineimg" />



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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    That was a nice short story, thanks to you and your little sister
    I hope she will become a big writer

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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    WoW

    that really shocked me
    children these days think of weird stuff, i thought the story would go innocent but what's with the cutting and blood @_@
    .....

    it's good for a 9 year old to have this imagination and even write
    ^^
    thanx

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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    it is a good story for a 9 years old girl
    woow your sister is a Talented
    it has a scary ending i thought it would be nice ending since she is 9 years old
    thank u

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    افتراضي رد: A story by my little sister

    I think ..it's ok to wrote story like this..
    maybe she thought this ending will be strong enough to make others says : WOW
    IT'S SCARY BUT i wrote story like this when i was 6 maybe
    i killed the boy ( Ahmad) in the end xD AFTER i tortured him with such drama
    don't worry, your sweet little sister exploring the world of deaths and the unknown one with a pictures in her mind
    what did she told you about the idea of her story ?
    i hope happy ,white and shiny life for your sister
    don't forget to improve her talent

    thank you spring lover .. be safe


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