...Azuma

^ ^...All I can say is...Ma Sha'a Allah
...Really...Ma Sha'a Allah

....Your idea and how you described it
...Your detailed words...which let's the reader make a picture in his mind

^ ^...I liked all of it
^ ^...."Especially the second part....with the "green hill
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...Keep up...
^ ^"...Although is has some tiny grammar errors
^ ^"...Don't mind...it's ok
^ ^....But don't you ever stop writing


Really...Ma sha'a Allah