An Intruder!!!!!!!

[mohbaboo]

there was an intruder
he's in my lounge
he cut the phone lines
can't talk loud
I wanted to scream for police
but I doubt
he's gonna hear me
when I shout

I hid in the closet
it was dark
I held my breath in
the sweating starts
I moved under the table
the dog barked
the thief heard 'em
and came down

he searched the lounge
but I wasn't there
he shouted my name
and I couldn't bear
how did he know
the name I dear

then I noticed
that he's gone
from behind he caught me
my life has been thrown
I'm really sorry
I haven't gone
earlier to bed
I didn't obey you, your son

I'm sorry daddy
I ask that you forgive
the ten year old son
to have another day to live
to live to hear you
with the orders you give
to sleep early
and wake up at five

[Rainbow Star]

OMG
I never expected the ending
It gave me chills

brother
I have no comment

thanks

[Harry Potter]

hhhaaa

pretty Good Story

Keep It Up

[mohbaboo]

thank you sister rainbow star and brother harry for passing by
and sharing your opinions with me

I'm glad you liked it

peace be upon all of you

[-мιккι-]

damn it !! you always pick the best words ever !!

i luved it very much mohaboo - san , maybe the story didn't have much impact on me , but the way you described it was really good ~

sorry for replying late ^^ but i thank you for sharing this Nice story with us ~

ur sis , MiKKi

[green tea]

wow
great story and great words
^_^
keep goin bro

[Lavendar]

Nice story

^_^

[mohbaboo]

thank you everyone for the cheering which motivates me to keep on doing my best
wish you all the best

[الدمعه]

الؤهقاسمؤخسشباغرخعيس

[pein-killer]

Story is very beautiful and amazing mohbaboo has created a really

LOOL

[mohbaboo]

Story is very beautiful and amazing mohbaboo has created a really

LOOL

hi my brother
thank God that you've enjoyed my little piece
I enjoyed writing it myself
thank you for dropping by
seeya