A Black Dot in the Ocean

**اخر شيء** · 30-9-2010 07:57 PM

A Black Dot in the Ocean

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In order to be happy…choosing to exchange someone’s life?…

My life…

A priceless life I refused to give up…

But it was too late to figure out how intensely I needed it once it was sold.

The unknown has invaded the known…again…

In a moonless night, on a land not so far from the ocean, children assembled first.

I was still a child as small and innocent as any of them.

The night waspitchblack. We could barely see anything.

Although fear should’ve sat on most of us, yet we seemed calm waiting for her,

The Chosen…

We believed strongly in the depth of our hearts about the thoughts written in the Holy Book.

“The Chosen will light the way to Heaven.”

We wanted to see Heaven…

“She will shine so brightly upon each and every soul trapped in this life.”

My soul wanted to be shone…

“She’ll purify us...

The Sinners…”

“I am a sinner”. I was born in this life.

And I wished to be purified…

toue rei zue kura ryou toue zue
kuroa ryou zue toue ryou rei neu ryou zue
va rei zue toue neu toue ryou toue kuroa
ryou rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va zue rei
va neu va rei va neu va zue rei
kuroa ryuo kuroa neu toue rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va
rei va neu kuroa toue rei rei

We sang...the place filled with the holy voices of little angels.

Calming the Chosen on her way to Heaven…

The men shoved their way into the first row.

Women followed up later taking place between us and their relatives.

Not very far, we saw a vision of some people coming toward us.

We knew the Chosen was among them and so sang again.

The ritual began.

The Chosen disengaged herself from the crowd of men and came forward.

Her eyes were blindfold, wearing clothes as whitish as the light.

She began walking slowly…so slow that one of her foot was resisting from advancing forward

and the other refused to race its twin.

It was pointless for Chosen to walk so quickly on that road.

The one to lead the way was a man bound with a black thread on his wrist connected to the Chosen.

The ones to protect her were two men each of her sides.

The one to prevent the approach of evilness was a man right behind her.

The one to remind her of her role as a Chosen was a man in front of her holding the holy book.

My eyes admired the scene.

Her last part of the last ceremony to end our suffering and purify the whole town will end soon.

She passed beside us. With her glossy brown hair, she looked perfectly just like a Chosen.

A little away from the cliff, they held her for a moment to deliver the speech…

A tuneless chant could be heard…

“Here, we’re standing in this _____ area…”

I could no more remember what was said that time. For a child, it was a new vocabulary for me that I actually had no interest to look into its meaning.

“We’re standing in this _____ area, this _____ ocean, this _____ day, to present you the greatest of us all, Vergina, our beloved daughter, as a _____ for you, Lord _____.”

He continued on…

“We have touched her not, nor did we drink her _____, for she is to become yours and yours only.

For this, we ask of you to forgive us and leave us not to starve.

Bestow your blessing upon us and our children and to become obedient only to you.

May the darkness of the sinners be purified by her light!”

Darkness?...

I believed in his words.

She’ll purify us all and save us from the darkness that lied deep within the hearts of the so called sinner…

With the absence of the moon, her light replaced our need for the light to see.

With one push, she fell so smoothly into the ocean.

So amazingly she flew in the air.

A splash of water could be heard and then only dead silence filled the place.

Children remained there waiting for the commotion while the adults went home.

I still remember those words. The letters of which goes under the definition of ‘Unforgettable words’

“A white bird will fly freely through the gargantuan sky. That’s when your wishes will be carried away with her wings to god.”

That line hasn’t granted yet. I wanted to see the Chosen as a bird…I wanted my wish to be granted.

The second became a minute and the minute became an hour.

We were motivated by curiosity to see…
We waited for Godot to come and he came…

The white bird came out of the ocean and flew high into the black sky.

It beamed a soft light that shone under the darkness.

She purified us…

“I want to become a Chosen!”

My wish was granted…

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Is it possible for someone to change his fate?

The weakness of human’s mind, incapable of inventing a time machine.

Regret…

What did I gain?

My life has changed since that incident.

I’ve been selected among all that existed as the Chosen. One that will bring forth god’s light upon all the created things. Only to those who believed in me…

“I’ve descended from above, within me laid the duty to purify.

I’ll revive the light that was stained with the darkness of the sinners.”

Those holy words were sufficient to wash all that which mingled in my veins the moment I was born.

No longer a sinner…

“Soon, soon enough and the curtains will open only to introduce me to the world.

Soon, I’ll have an end worth of remembrance…”

An end?

The Chief came.

“Tomorrow as planned. Gather them on the town hall. The Messenger is off to get the message.

We mustn’t cause any problem. The Chosen is among one of those angels.

She mustn’t be harmed from the darkness.” He proclaimed.

“Everything is set as destined. Pay no worries.” He replied.

We were on the exposition to recognize our purpose of existence.

I was the only one who existed…

On walking on the road, everything was decided.

I, with other little angels, walked around the town.

We were told to take a tour then immediately come back home.

Other than us, the roads were empty except a bunch of men gathered up the cliff.

The judge and his lawyers gazed at us one by one as we passed beside.

The judgment befell upon us like thunder.

“You, my little angel, is the next Chosen!”

The judge exclaimed pointing his finger at me.

“I am the Chosen?”

“I, the Chosen, by standing on any piece of land can make it shine richly green.

My presence can send enough strength needed to refresh that which were by the hands of god.

The palm of my hands transmits the little bounds of my heart into the small bodies of those weak creatures.

This body of mine omits the light that which can have no replacement even compared to the shinning moon.

I am the Chosen whom can save and devour all into eternal darkness.

Step me forward to my one and only Lord…”

toue rei zue kura ryou toue zue
kuroa ryou zue toue ryou rei neu ryou zue

There I stood under the shades of trees around me. They were me and I was them…

We were connected through the shades.

They formed a magnificent web which consoled me. I was protected from the outer world.

Savor and her companions…together forever till the ritual ended.

Transforming was once said to be painful. I found no harm caused to me or to the other me who was beneath the crust to be reborn as a new plant…

va rei zue toue neu toue ryou toue kuroa
ryou rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va zue rei
va neu va rei va neu va zue rei
Smooth breeze blew, pedals fell down, and the earth witnessed the birth of happiness.

The road I walked on was filled with roses competing to be stepped over by me. Nature was celebrating the wise chosen of the one destined to fill the world with peace.

I was the only person who’ll purify all that which whispered “I want to live.”

But I was the one who needed to live…

kuroa ryuo kuroa neu toue rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va
rei va neu kuroa toue rei rei

Time passed by and five days were cut half into 2 days and 12 hours.

I had so little time to prepare physically, in which I had no hands to fasten the matter, and more importantly mentally…

The thoughts of living as a newly divine creature, I was so happy that it hurt not to be for the rest of my life…thoughts of not wanting to give up what could never be experienced again once it end.

The world…my world seemed to be blooming.

my world…in its golden age.

My world was sharing my fate, the fate of the Chosen.

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“I can feel all the thoughts so strong in the depth of my heart…

A question I asked over and over, wanting to tell you

Won’t you make my wish?

You, who was born in this world to spend eternity in this lonely ocean of darkness.

You’ll be sleeping in the night that doesn’t end.

Peacefully and quietly where no one can disturb you as you purify the world…”

“You are the one who they call ‘The Chosen’, am I right?”

On that ominous night, a man paid me a visit, an unknown creature…

“And who might you be?”

“One who exists to save you, the Chosen, who have been engulfed in darkness…”

“Is it I your mentioning?”

“Aren’t you the only one who is in alienation?

Here! where light is forbidden to shine.”

“I don’t need a materialistic light. My life is brightened by the light of my heart!”

“I can barely see this light.”

“You human beings only believe what you se-…”

“-Aren’t you the same as we are? A human being?”

“You believe what you see!”

“Heh, what I heard was a disbeliever as a child, now, the teenage became a believer?”

“A child-…”

Stoutly said : “The heart of a believer doesn’t follow what others believe, but rather what his heart believes in!”

Hearing that, I felt a tight sensation in my heart.

Why is it that it bothers me?

I am a true believer…I didn’t follow what they believe in…no…

I was a disbeliever…now I’m just a follower of what they believe in…

Am I not a true believer?

That night, I was allowed to take a quick glance at the view of the world I’ll soon save…

The moon was high and clear among all the starts that glittered.

Only dead silent engulfed the place.

The small cottages and houses were all gray…

I got distracted over what that strange old man has said…

I must prove to myself that when I followed the others in what they believe in was only what my heart strongly needed to believe…

I disengaged myself from the guardians and flowed freely to where the ocean lied…

where all the Chosen were thrown…from above.

I went and saw…things I shouldn’t see…

And the prohibited words I spoke…”a lie?”

I fell into my crises. I fell on the ground and never rose again…

They found me unconscious…and I remained like this for days…

“The view I see now is the same as yesterday

The street I walk on is still the same

But my whole world has changed

I definitely can’t smile like that again

Who I was up until yesterday, will never show up again…”

And again that unknown creature came…

“It seems to me that the Chosen has seen what she was blind of to witness.

I’m not expecting an answer though. I’m just relieved to see that you can still stand on your feet.”

I couldn’t speak…my other self carried a heavy burden that made my body freeze.

However, in front of him, my tongue moved.

“My heart hurts…”

“This is the sign of being a human being.”

“I wonder where does this pain come from.

Should I go to the direction where the pain is coming? I’m afraid.

I know not what prevents me from going, but this heart of mine beats so fast whenever I took a step toward that direction. What happened to me?

I was so strong and brave, yet now I’m this week to take even one step?...”

“You are a human being after all.”

“I’m afraid from that weakness…I’m afraid of going there or getting near from it.

Tell me, you who might hold the answer, what should I do?

Am I to stay like this forever? Trapped in between being the Chosen or simply a human being…

For what did I live for all these years?

What is my duty? Or rather what is my real purpose?

For whose sake am I living for?

What’s going to happen to me? Am I to bear this forever?

This which seems endless…

Speak, you who might save me from the nothingness I became…

If I were neither to become the Chosen nor to have been a human being, then what am I?

I lived and breathed the whole time for what?...

Why am I here? Where am I supposed to be?”

“Any human being, in order to make life shine, is prepared to have an ending with death.

This cell you’re living in is more like your own heart, the heart of each and every Chosen that had lived here, as black as pitch with the thick darkness. This dark view hides the mysterious truth of the years.

In the darkness of the pitch black world drawn with sins, one’s self desires for a moment to taste the beauty of the spiritual side, which will get you back from the unconscious world to the conscious one.

Go there!

Where the pain is coming from, there is something real!

Your questions will be answered with truth. Extend your sight at all directions; your questions will be answered for sure.

Dying solves nothing!!”

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The light of the Chosen residing inside me was like a needle that thrust through my chest.

I felt like a peculiar kind of pain entered my body and creeped around my heart.

I succumbed to the pain as it twisted the needle in my heart a little more and drained any ounce of hope I had left of surviving…

“Surviving? Continue on living?…Hope?

I feel like I’m living without hope.

Where can I find this hope?

Have you lost yours too?

What is it to be done now?

Is it possible to make another hope? Can we live without it?

Can we borrow it from someone? Would they give us?

We, who wondered around searching for the meaning of our existence…”

“It hurts. Regardless of how many times I tried looking around for someone, no one was found in my sight.

I’m in agony… is there no one who share the same pain?

I can’t do anything. I’m powerless.

Time is running out. Tomorrow my story will end.

I feel jaded. The weight of the burden is killing me slowly…slowly.”

“It’s getting late.”

Even though I’m trapped in this cottage, I knew night was coming.

The day slowly ended.

I was slowly heading to my end…my death.

I wasn’t afraid of it, but now fear was eating my very soul.

Stuck in here all alone…I wasn’t hoping to be saved.

The thought of sharing the same happiness human beings had, never crossed my mind.

Once truth was declared and that old man fed my heart with even more confusion, it haunted me day and night.

“I want this real happiness!

I want to live!”

I heard sounds of footsteps outside the cottage.

The door opened with an intimidating creak.

A single dim ray shot from outside the cottage fell upon my dark eyes.

Yes, my eyes had grown darker each day I spend locked away in this haunted cottage.

I was stained black. Darkness enveloped light and controlled over everything that was beside me.

I was no different from those things…

I kept my eyes shut as tight as I could and only listened.

The sound of their footsteps became more clearer.

“Prepare her well, mother!” the judge spoke.

I knew his sound pitch and could distinguish his voice among million ones.

Yes, the voice of the man who set my destiny on stone…

“Tonight we will purge the girl.”

Someone came so close to me and whispered: “Dear, stand up so I could change your clothes.

You’re going to meet your Lord today at night. I’m so proud of you.

You defeated the darkness which distracted you!”

My mother…her kind voice and gentle hands batting my shoulders send me back to the nostalgic days. The sealed past started to stir in my chest, where I used to run around the house with laugh until she gets the breakfast done.

When I stripped, she came crying out loud “Are you alright?” and threw her arms around me…

When she encouraged me to walk forward toward grasping my dreams…

I turned into her warm embrace and was on the verge of tears.

“Dear, I know it was hard for you to bear such difficult situations. But worry not, for everything will end today. Stay strong till night. It’ll descend soon…very soon.”

Mother’s encouraging tone made the matter even worse.

“I feel enervated…I don’t have enough strength to carry on this horribleness…” I said with a low voice in which only she could hear.

Mother didn’t reply until she was sure enough that only my presence and hers existed inside the cottage.

“You can relax now. Your Lord is waiting for you. Weren’t you eager to meet him?”

“I am, but why should I sacrifice myself?”

“You’re not sacrificing your life. Fulfilling your duty it is as the Chosen…endowing your life to your one and only Lord!

Beside, you’re alive now, isn’t this enough?”

“No, it isn’t enough at all.”

“My dear, your words are like swords stabbing the Lord…”

“These aren’t my words. My own words have died since I became the Chosen.

These are the words of a human being trapped inside the body of an Angel…”

“Enough! What happened to the daughter I rose? The one who wished to be the Chosen!”

“I’m no more your daughter. I am the Chosen now!”

“And I’m glad and honored to see my own child becoming the Chosen who will save this world.”

“I’m not glad at all. I want to return being a human being just like you.

I want myself back!”

“He was right! Darkness approached you. You’re now stained with darkness.

Look at yourself. Since when has your smile fade this much?”

“Since the day truth revealed itself!”

“Your sadness…is it from becoming the Chosen?”
“It’s because of not being able to hold dear that which belongs to me…”

“It’s true that you had to sacrifice a lot for the sake of transforming into the Chosen, but you see, my dear, you don’t have to try hard anymore. You have already become the Chosen!

There’s no need to feel sad over what has gone. Don’t chase after what makes you cry,

try hard by yourself with what is left.”

Nothing was left to try hard with…

I was dressed with a white dress, as whitish as the pure light.

And they blinded me so that earthly pleasure could never reach to me…

Sitting on my knees, I heard again sound of footsteps, the door has opened and suddenly…

A familiar sound… “Have you talked with them?”

A voice which eased my suffering and lightened my heavy heart.

“I see you’ve spent some time with your mother. Anything changed?”

“The whole country is after my death, my parents are no different…”

“What do you want to do? Go against it or with it?”

“Can we do it? against them?”

“We can!”

“I can’t…”
“You can!

You are the source of hope!”

“Hope?”

“To purify the world is what they all want from you in exchange of your life.

With your death, they gain strength to continue on living!

With your life, they gain the hope to live!

Having you, they can feel they’re alive!

If you died, no one will be troubled. Actually, they would enjoy your death. They never thought of this ritual as killing someone innocent. With your agreement it sounded different, but to me it’s all the same.

What is the worth of this world if we were to kill those who are said to be known as the Chosen?

If we were to kill them, what will be saved in this world?

Is the world supposed to be worth more than them?

What is the worth of this world, when it will not allow you, who made no sin, to live in it?

If I were to go against this world or save you, I’d choose to save you to the end!

Even at the cost of my life!!”

Silence filled the place. I couldn’t hold my tears…

“Strange…

People out there were happy when I chose death over being alive.

And now a man who I met before couple of days, hurts himself and may commit, what’s called as crime here, in his bid just to save me…”

We both remained silent for a moment. Even with my eyes blind, I could hear his heavy breathe…

“What do I need to do?”

“I have a plan. You need to escape and run to a save place.”

“If everyone in the country wants to kill me

How far do I have to run away to be safe?

Are there any places that are safe?”

“If there isn’t any, then make one!”

“How foolish I am…

I’ve desperately searched for a place where I can live peacefully.

The Chosen who never believed in materialistic things, was herself at heart searching for a materialistic place to live in. Peace was never been a thing to touch.”

He untied the fold on my eyes and got down on the ground in front of me.

“Listen carefully to what I’ll say. We need to get you out of here as soon as we can!”

“I wonder how much longer this road will continue on for?

I wish I can stop time…I’m waiting for a miracle to happen.

I long for that hand…that patted me on the back.

The hand of a father…who used to rub my head.

The hand that taught me how to draw dreams.

The hand that soothed me all this time.

I want to hold it tightly…”

The ocean, so clean and quite.

I’ve always looked at it from above, but never experienced touching not even sailing on it.

It looked so dazzling.

I, and some unknown people, on a calm night prepared a boat and were ready to sail on the ocean back to the city where that old man lived…his hometown.

They gave me a black dress to wear and a black blanket to cover on it.

We promised to meet on this land before taking off, but he didn’t show up.

Never did I felt that scared from death before. My feet held strongly on the ground, resisting from advancing.

It felt as if the shadow of death reached its hands on my feet and grabbed it tightly preventing me from escaping.

The spirits of each and every dead Chosen, disposed of in the cave, still suffer.

The souls immersed in the ocean, still suffer…

I haven’t done anything for them. I shouldn’t escape from this land and leave things unsettled…

If the town people knew about that, they would get furious and might never live their normal life as they used to do.

However, I wanted to live!

The Thoughts of having many wonderful times just by being alive made me want to live…

They were my hope!

Everyone will begrudge me…Having expectations of being saved then being betrayed…

“I can’t save them. The Chosen can’t save anyone.

The Chosen was only an illusion born from darkness…

I’m going to be fine. I can live by myself!”

The moment I put my foot on the boat, I felt relieved. I used to think that it was impossible to find a safe place, yet the small boat sheltered us. It welcomed me with open arms even though I was the Chosen, who’s supposed to be an abomination that will bring disaster to this world if I were to live longer than what I was allowed to be…

The preparation was over. We waited for his arrival…however, he didn’t show up.

Back then when we were inside the cottage, he told me that he’d disguise as the Chosen and will reveal himself when the right time hits.

I wondered what took him so long.

The ritual was about to begin. We heard strange sounds and decided to leave in case things went out of the old man’s hand.

We sailed away from the land.

Watching and remaining silent were what I’ve done all the time. I couldn’t prevent them from leaving him, nor did I reject on going without him. I was afraid from stalling. I didn’t want the town people to see me. I didn’t want them to devastate my happiness… I didn’t wish to be a sacrifice…didn’t want to be the Chosen…didn’t want to die…

I saw a light shone on top of the cliff and lights deep within the ocean just beneath the cliff.

I kept watching the land as it shrank and got smaller and smaller…to the extent that it looked so much like a black dot…a black dot in the ocean…

I gazed at it until it disappeared through darkness, not because it’s be the last time I’ll watch it; rather it’ll be my very beginning…the beginning of my second story.

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This is the fourth story I wrote.

Please feel free to comment and criticize.
I do really like to read your point of view on how the story is and what to do to improve it.

**Naro-chan** · 30-9-2010 08:40 PM

peace be upon you my dear " the last thing " xD

Well , well ... be sure i will write freely right now

to start with ... i really do like your piece of lovely verse ( it smells very delicious ) believe me

then , the point you were around it ... i didn't get it yet
cuz ... i felt like i am before a paradox in speech
when you talked about evilness and purification .... the same with devil and angles

something i don't understand here

then he came
from the story which is written above ... i felt you have changed
you were a lively one ... now you turned to be like dead ppl ... why ??? why things go like this

so i connect the first part with the last thing

it's your life ... that life is very tired ...of what
??
i wanna know it myself ... if it is not now ... may be in the following chapters honey

in the last ... i wanna give you a big rose ... not for this topic but ... for another thing in my heart

**اخر شيء** · 1-10-2010 07:02 AM

Ara ara? peace be upon you my dear Naro-chan

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

Well , well ... be sure i will write freely right now

to start with ... i really do like your piece of lovely verse ( it smells very delicious ) believe me

then , the point you were around it ... i didn't get it yet
cuz ... i felt like i am before a paradox in speech
when you talked about evilness and purification .... the same with devil and angles

something i don't understand here

then he came
from the story which is written above ... i felt you have changed
you were a lively one ... now you turned to be like dead ppl ... why ??? why things go like this

so i connect the first part with the last thing

it's your life ... that life is very tired ...of what
??
i wanna know it myself ... if it is not now ... may be in the following chapters honey

Hmmm? you got it so quickly
I'm amazed ^__^
What your reading is actually the end of the story. You know that stories
differ from one to another

The source of evilness and purification. When You have the power to control evil and at the same time
you can use it to purify, you become the source of those both
You'll get to understand everything with the coming chapters

Thanks for commenting. I really appreciate it so much
Please do read my coming chapters. Onegaishimasu

in the last ... i wanna give you a big rose ... not for this topic but ... for another thing in my heart

Eh? :\

**lolleta** · 1-10-2010 04:52 PM

mmmm

that way of writing remind me with some girl i really love it from deep inside
she is gone with dead bye

hope u to be her "

....

u know what's delights ur story???
it's the Mystry

i really can't catch ur mind
but as u said .. it's deffer from one to another

there in every part of ur story i can read the scenario of my life

somehow .. u have touched a deep part of me

...
ur point of purification is inside every body even the devils
it's updating as soon as u decide

sometimes when u feel that u r the source of evilness ... u can hear a faint voice
it seems so far .. but it's acually very close to u
it's the voice of purification

>>>
ur life which had taken and what r u lookin for

really .. no where it's gone
but still here whaiting for ur hand to catch it

just close ur eyes and take deep breath
and u gonna be home

....
i'm wiating for the next
till that time .. have another comment

**اخر شيء** · 1-10-2010 08:54 PM

I feel flattered
^///^
The idea of purification mingles inside each one of us. If we have the power purify the world, then why not
But the disaster comes when someone draws for you a wrong way to do that
and instead of purifying, your destroying

Thnaks lolleta
Your comment has encouraged me to continue on writing.
Here's chapter 2
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Chapter II

I added chapter 2 in the first reply

**Naro-chan** · 2-10-2010 02:08 AM

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة اخر شيء

Ara ara? peace be upon you my dear Naro-chan

Hmmm? you got it so quickly
I'm amazed ^__^
What your reading is actually the end of the story. You know that stories
differ from one to another

really ? yattaa ... yep i am so familiar with those types of stories actually if the story is completed i would know that myself that it was only the end !

The source of evilness and purification. When You have the power to control evil and at the same time
you can use it to purify, you become the source of those both
You'll get to understand everything with the coming chapters

can't wait ><""

Thanks for commenting. I really appreciate it so much
Please do read my coming chapters. Onegaishimasu

thanx for you ...
of course ... i am gonna read all of them In Sha'a Allah

it seems you have already put the 2nd part
okay ... cuz i have something to do right now ( sleeping ) XD maybe next time i'll continue

Eh? :\

it's a secret lol

salam

**اخر شيء** · 2-10-2010 08:33 AM

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

really ? yattaa ... yep i am so familiar with those types of stories actually if the story is completed i would know that myself that it was only the end !

Hmm?
You know something. I'm sure that you'll get surprised when you read the end

thanx for you ...
of course ... i am gonna read all of them In Sha'a Allah

it seems you have already put the 2nd part
okay ... cuz i have something to do right now ( sleeping ) XD maybe next time i'll continue

Thanks a lot
I appreciate everything you do for me
Sleep well and have lots of sweet dreams. The sun has already rose here

it's a secret lol

salam

Why is it bothering me? >___< do I know you? I feel like I do

**Naro-chan** · 3-10-2010 12:20 AM

okay cool girl
say : لا إله إلا الله

ahh after a glance of sleep and full day at campus i came here
so... i can't collect my self
the thing you are talking about is not familiar to my thoughts
i read a lot of western works ... and i can here consider that you yourself used some aspects of Christian culture
like ... chosen , pure , sin and sinners, angle , god

those terms..
you really okay with them right now ?

okay
let's return to your amazing way of writing

lol ... the point now
you are a child
and with group of children
that's nice
oooh ... you have assemble right now
... that reminds me of novels about island- adventure like lord of the flies

but the question is here ... how come you began your life here ... and above you said you sold your priceless life
why you did so ?
who told you about that thing ... to be happy after exchange others life
!!!

you were a such plan person

those things in my mind i am sure i am gonna understand them next in sha'a Allah

ps. if i bothered you in any word plz pardon me ... cuz i am sleepy right now after a long day of work ... i got sleep now cuz another day is waiting
and if my thoughts is differnt from you ... sure it's the culture gab between us ... so just smile when you don't get wat i mean

Why is it bothering me? >___< do I know you? I feel like I do

really ? hhh lool
yes you know me ... i am the one who is talking right now with you
may be later ...

**اخر شيء** · 3-10-2010 07:05 PM

Omoshiroi ni anata

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

okay cool girl
say : لا إله إلا الله

لا إله إلا الله محمد رسول الله =)
Your long post makes my heart beat so fast

ahh after a glance of sleep and full day at campus i came here
so... i can't collect my self
the thing you are talking about is not familiar to my thoughts
i read a lot of western works ... and i can here consider that you yourself used some aspects of Christian culture
like ... chosen , pure , sin and sinners, angle , god
those terms..
you really okay with them right now ?

hmm? campus? I wanna go campus too T^T
Haha, anyway, your right. I used aspects of Christian culture. Pure and angel has nothing to do with Christianity.
Frankly, I'm not attacking them by writing this story. I hope you'll get whom I'm directing my criticism when you
read till the end.

but the question is here ... how come you began your life here ... and above you said you sold your priceless life
why you did so ?
who told you about that thing ... to be happy after exchange others life
!!!

You see, everything happens in a small village, a town you may say.
Before the heroine begins narrating her story of what happened exactly from the beginning, I like
to put her piece of mind when she realized the truth

those things in my mind i am sure i am gonna understand them next in sha'a Allah

Insha'Allah you'll understand everything

ps. if i bothered you in any word plz pardon me ... cuz i am sleepy right now after a long day of work ... i got sleep now cuz another day is waiting
and if my thoughts is differnt from you ... sure it's the culture gab between us ... so just smile when you don't get wat i mean

^_________________________________________________ __________^
No worries~ I understand each and every word you said.
Feel free to say whatever crosses your mind. Your not bothering me at all.

really ? hhh lool
yes you know me ... i am the one who is talking right now with you
may be later ...

Ayashiiiii <__<

I'll post chapter 3 tomorrow

**Naro-chan** · 3-10-2010 07:30 PM

oh i catch u girly
you wanna go to campus _} sure something wrong with u

Haha, anyway, your right. I used aspects of Christian culture. Pure and angel has nothing to do with Christianity

.

so as i thought ... it's kind of intertextuality
^_^

i can know some now about the story
the protagonist is a female
it tells us about some shadows in her childhood
the place in a tiny village or town ... i suppose she lives with her family with their tribe also

that's nice ...

and this ???

Ayashiiiii <__<

it's japanees ???/
lol

ah in my previous post i was about to ask about something and i forget dunno why loool
but now i 'll just ask

toue rei zue kura ryou toue zue
kuroa ryou zue toue ryou rei neu ryou zue
va rei zue toue neu toue ryou toue kuroa
ryou rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va zue rei
va neu va rei va neu va zue rei
kuroa ryuo kuroa neu toue rei kuroa ryuo zue rei va
rei va neu kuroa toue rei rei

those words of chanting ... from any language ?
and that's it

today i am not gonna sleep so don't worry ... i have Quiz to study for and some stupid acts of plays to read

salam

**اخر شيء** · 6-10-2010 01:36 PM

Hi, sorry for the delay. I had so many problems.
Here's chapter 3
enjoy reading~

Chapter III

Added in the first reply. Thanks Azuma for teaching me this amazing way of organizing
>___<=b
__________________________________________________ ____________________________

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

i can know some now about the story
the protagonist is a female
it tells us about some shadows in her childhood
the place in a tiny village or town ... i suppose she lives with her family with their tribe also

sekai!
and soon with the coming chapters she'll tell you about the past, present and you'll be able to predict what
happened to her in the future =)

it's japanees ???/
lol

Yeah, its Japanese. Didn't you say "yattaaa~"
So did I joined some Japanese words with English ^o^

those words of chanting ... from any language ?
and that's it

This is called "The Grand Fonic Hymn" also known as "Tear's hymn"
If your an otaku, you'll understand what I mean.

today i am not gonna sleep so don't worry ... i have Quiz to study for and some stupid acts of plays to read
salam

Still studying. Ah now I feel the blessing of having finished school and uni
phew -___-

And thanks again for commenting and spending your time to read my story
arigatou gozaimashita

**أسمـــاء** · 6-10-2010 03:52 PM

Hello sis
haow are you ?

" class="inlineimg" /> It's nice to see your creativity by showing your short stories
I did write some before ,but they may seem boring ...
any way ..I'm here to thank u and to recommend sth
in order to have all chapters displayed at the first replay
why don't you put them like that

best wishes for you
PS: I like your english ...go on

**اخر شيء** · 6-10-2010 06:20 PM

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Azuma

Hello sis
haow are you ?

" class="inlineimg" /> It's nice to see your creativity by showing your short stories
I did write some before ,but they may seem boring ...
any way ..I'm here to thank u and to recommend sth
in order to have all chapters displayed at the first replay
why don't you put them like that

best wishes for you
PS: I like your english ...go on

Hi Azuma
Thank you for the sweet and nice words. I'm glad to have you read my short stories
If you don't mind, I'd like to read the stories you wrote
It's ok if its boring. Even my first stories were boring. Believe me, I wrote something
that would let you bored and on top of that it'll give you a headache

Thank you for showing me a great way of showing all the chapters
in my first reply
And thank you for commenting
Hope to see you again soon

**Naro-chan** · 6-10-2010 07:04 PM

ooh
finally i could come here

i was surprised when she became the chosen
rituals of the changing reminds me of a mysterious culture

any way

chosen in your point of view ... considered as what exactly ? cuz all i get ... she is an angle ( or human changed to be an angle )
c'mon ... you are inflected with such anime or what ??
XD

the last thing }}} okay i am calling your name now lol

btw ... ur words are awesome hmmmm
i bet you wrote alot before

If your an otaku, you'll understand what I mean

sorry ... i did not get " otaku " meaning
i am still a freshman at this world

okay ...
have a nice " evening " cuz the day has already finished

salam

**اخر شيء** · 7-10-2010 01:16 PM

Oohh I haven't known that my story got sticky
yay~
Thanks for the one who did that

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

chosen in your point of view ... considered as what exactly ? cuz all i get ... she is an angle ( or human changed to be an angle )
c'mon ... you are inflected with such anime or what ??
XD

The Chosen is someone with the blood of an angel
Only the well informed man, the big chief you might say, can know her among all the children
Her other self, the angel that lives inside her, must be awaken before the ritual begins
That's what the chosen is, in my point of view =)
well, you shouldn't believe such a thing
And I'm not infected with such an anime. It's pure imagination my dear~

the last thing }}} okay i am calling your name now lol

You don't have to add "the". Last thing is enough ^^;

btw ... ur words are awesome hmmmm
i bet you wrote alot before

That's my fourth story after all.

sorry ... i did not get " otaku " meaning
i am still a freshman at this world

Otaku is the person who is addicted to animes and such
The more you love animes and mangas, the more you become an otaku

**lolleta** · 7-10-2010 09:22 PM

ur dream came true
and here u r the choosen

that's great ... but what after to be
i'm looking for the next

>>>

**اخر شيء** · 8-10-2010 08:41 AM

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة lolleta

ur dream came true
and here u r the choosen
that's great ... but what after to be
i'm looking for the next
>>>

Thanks lolleta for your nice words
I hope the coming chapters will please you even more

Chapter 4 has been added in the first reply.
Enjoy reading~

**Naro-chan** · 8-10-2010 09:28 AM

gimme a break
^^"""
lol ... all of this is from your pure imagination
lool

one part last
....
i need now to reread the story from the 1st word &
till now

then later
btw
JOM'A MUBARKA

SALAM

**اخر شيء** · 8-10-2010 08:35 PM

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan

gimme a break
^^"""
lol ... all of this is from your pure imagination

Hmm? you don't believe it?
Listen, when you get to see many things happening in your life, you'll become like me
Sometimes, its hard to make your words reach some ears, especially to those whom
you need them to listen to you. Even if you wrote those words, it won't change anything.
Your turn comes here, where you need to make things look like a story. Many people tend
to think about stories as stories, but when read carefully, stories can build a generation
and destroy it at the same time according to the message conveyed within
That's when I started function my mind to begin inventing ideas from my own imagination
It took me some time to reach a better level than what I used to be =____=

one part last
....
i need now to reread the story from the 1st word &
till now

then later
btw
JOM'A MUBARKA

SALAM

Huh? why re-read the story? are you confused or something
You understood everything, didn't you? I hope you did
And Jom'a mubarak to you too my dear

One last thing =)
You see why I choose my username as "last thing"
anyway, I'd like to see your opinions of the chapters I've wrote so far
Is there any unrealistic feature in the conversations or when narrating the story?
Have I described enough to the extent that you can see clearly the image?
The only criticism I had from the day I began writing was "no enough description"
So I was wondering, is there enough description or do I need to add more?

**Naro-chan** · 8-10-2010 09:00 PM

lol
to start from what you have ended with ^^""
description
ah yeah ... may be in the 1st and 2nd ones there is a lack of infomation
but to me it's alright after that
cuz ... this is the writer ideology to write
^^
so ... the style is okay and a man should read the words more and more to analysis what he read
because he is infront of a stunning story-righter
^^""
this brings to the 1st point
honey i am not saying i don't believe you or don't your words
no no no ... exactly no way
but ... i was so surprised to know that all is from your own
i meant ... that i should be myself for a while to understand more about the story cuz ... T____T things are mixed together right now ^____^
or as " up - side - down " xD it's a name of a traditional food here in Sham

okay ... you are an experiment human
i am not a thing in front of you

so what comes from here is only respect and proud

about the last chapter ... sorry honey i didn't read any yet ... even i was most of the day here ...exploring net
but ... as you know it's work and work and wooork

XD ... .

the last thing
i suppose it as the not without the
cuz i am now so familiar with last thing

see you

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