MY Two Selves

[lolleta]

My 2 Selves

my first one ... i lived me there
can't remember .. i did once care
till i made ... my own nightmare
i lost it in the middle of nowhere

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i tried to stop and find the right way
but every one ... asked me to stay
"if u'll leave.. u gonna miss the play"
"it's not a matter.. for another day"

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and day by day .. i lost my gole
niether more targets, nor any role
they played by me .. as a real ball
and i was looking .. from a narrow hole

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it's not me .. it's not my old face
is that my home or a strange place
i needed someone to clear the case
to help me standing on strong base

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he was my lord who guided me
holded my hand and let me see
the way i need to get the old me
now i almost what i dreemed to be

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common my self ... back to me again
i'll never let u go .. and miss the train
a promise, no more cry..no more of pain

[أسمـــاء]

That was too nice
you were lost like in mist until everything was cleared up .
Sometimes it feels like you really are inside a nightmare ,everything around is dark
and you are running looking for a gleam of light , you know longing for light as if you impatiently waiting to wake up ,and everything must end
But what if all that wasn't just a dream , what If I am really drowning inside darkness
Then I think we have nothing but to fight with patience and hope
No matter how long it takes , I must find what I'm really seeking
.That is
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Today I read about someone who was looked up in a prison ,
you know how life would seem to worth Nothing then , but he was as free as you are coz he was having Hope
I just was imagining how hope could change someone's life from hell into heaven,
and from being a prisoner into being free!n



Glad that it ends that way lolitta
And hope we all find what we are aiming atwith Hope -yes0" class="inlineimg" />j

[lolleta]

That was too nice
you were lost like in mist until everything was cleared up .
Sometimes it feels like you really are inside a nightmare ,everything around is dark
and you are running looking for a gleam of light , you know longing for light as if you impatiently waiting to wake up ,and everything must end
But what if all that wasn't just a dream , what If I am really drowning inside darkness
Then I think we have nothing but to fight with patience and hope
No matter how long it takes , I must find what I'm really seeking
.That is
................

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hi sweety .. miss ur touches sooooo much

i like ur words above
.. i know it's not other's fault .. but some is mine too
i made some fear inside by myself ...
although i was feelig lost .. i was afraid to feel much lost if i went away

u know .. if u were in darkness for long time and
turned back to the light suddenly
u wont be able to open ur eyes at moment

u have to adapt for changing
...
tha's what i was fighting for

Glad that it ends that way lolitta
And hope we all find what we are aiming atwith Hope -yes0" class="inlineimg" />

thanks dear so much

i'm still fighting to be better
and nothing except hope& faith with me

[Schwert]

Nnnniiicce
good job sis Lolleta, it is really terrific topic
nice words with nice style and expressive expression
U go then U go then U back with a huge and brilliant topics
I appreciate ur effort and ingenuity here sis
and as we used to say everytime Go On cus with creativity life gets beautiful and special meaning
my regards

[lolleta]

Nnnniiicce
good job sis Lolleta, it is really terrific topic
nice words with nice style and expressive expression
U go then U go then U back with a huge and brilliant topics
I appreciate ur effort and ingenuity here sis
and as we used to say everytime Go On cus with creativity life gets beautiful and special meaning
my regards

hi saber
ah ... thanks really
ur replay encourages me
in the first attempt for me to write a poem
i find the fans clapping to me

i'm greatful for u ... ur words mean alot for me

[دريرة]

I read it like million times....coz I melt in the meaning sooooo far...and WOW
you sooooo good
and by the way ..I loved your way in showing your topic

keep it up

[lolleta]

I read it like million times....coz I melt in the meaning sooooo far...and WOW
you sooooo good
and by the way ..I loved your way in showing your topic

keep it up

hi dorira ... welcome dear

something shines on the forum today
i think that u r *_^

glad that u like it

[---sky pearl]

it is realy very very nice
the words it was very beutiful very kinds and it was factual
u r sometime we can't see u her
but the last u come with stunning topic
when i read it i felt something strang
u r creative
continuo
sky pearl

[lolleta]

it is realy very very nice
the words it was very beutiful very kinds and it was factual
u r sometime we can't see u her
but the last u come with stunning topic
when i read it i felt something strang
u r creative
continuo
sky pearl

helllllllo dear
if i know that i 'll have such a nice comment from u
i would put it from long time

u just who make it shiny my pearl

thanks alot

[اخر شيء]

"Speechless"

I can't say anything for words are not enough to explain how amazing your lines are
Your pretty good at rhyming =)

God bless you my dear
Go forward >_<=b

[the Assassin]

Hey butterfly, it has been too long, can’t remember or even count the length, but all I have to say is I’m here! Anyway, I’m no good at apologizing, so I beg your pardon on that too.

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“Sometimes it’s hard to pay good tribute to such piece of art “

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Fade Away

Long ago, she was sitting there!d
Staring at the stars, but no one care!d
She was sad, lived an endless nightmare,d
She was lost, in the middle of nowhere

oOo

She was tired, searched for the right way,d
No one was there to confess her to stay,d
It was harsh, lonely, and dramatic playd
She collapsed, but recalled the other dayd

oOo

Where she was strong, and reached her goal
She stood up, and tried to play her role
She stopped, didn’t dare to touch the ball
As she was marshing from a narrow hole

oOo

She was starring at the window with a pale face
She was confused as if that her own old place
It was hard to natter and solve her case
No one helps, but she kept her base

oOo

She rose her arm and say “ Lord help me “d
Guide me, let my dreary eyes clearly see
Give me strength; let me get back to ol’ me
I’m strong but is this how it suppose to be

oOo

Years passed, she was there again,
She is been waiting for the next train,
She was certien, oneday she’ll forget her pain
Cuz’ she is bright, not that insane

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I donno why I wrote, but I couldn’t resist .gif" border="0" alt="" title="0" class="inlineimg" /> your piece of art was brilliant, and I tried to make the past version of your painting!

Ja'na

[lolleta]

"Speechless"

I can't say anything for words are not enough to explain how amazing your lines are
Your pretty good at rhyming =)

God bless you my dear
Go forward >_<=b

hey lastooo
ooh really thanks for ur sweet comment
it's just some of yours
^_*

>>>

The Assassin

no.. no no no ... i can't believe my eyes

i sware of god .. it's the best comment'v caught my eyes ever

u know wht ? u just have the talent to make others happy
ur special words and brilliant replays

that what awsem
i really can't find the word which give u my real feeling rightnow

i'm not wonder how did u do it ..
cuz i know u r the master
but
how was the idea created in ur mind


as if u'd lived the experiance with me !!.. and know every tiny detales
u just made it in another shiny show

although .. it's not fair to put mine beside yours
cuz it's a known result challenge

but i know .. u didn't mean it

Years passed, she was there again,
She is been waiting for the next train,
She was certien, oneday she’ll forget her pain
Cuz’ she is bright, not that insane

sure i'm
^_*

it's a big proud for me .. to have such a nice comment like that

u just ... made me fall in love with poems

i thank u over millions ... sir

[the Assassin]

The Assassin
no.. no no no ... i can't believe my eyes
i sware of god .. it's the best comment'v caught my eyes ever
u know wht ? u just have the talent to make others happy
ur special words and brilliant replays

donno what to say, but thanks

that what awsem
i really can't find the word which give u my real feeling rightnow
i'm not wonder how did u do it ..
cuz i know u r the master
but
how was the idea created in ur mind

i ain't no master, but i was only trying to make something anyway, the idea was created by making the "past version" of
your topic, cuz' u wrote your topic in present tense and i tried to make the past, i was struggling with the rhyme though,
but i hope it was good enough

as if u'd lived the experiance with me !!.. and know every tiny detales
u just made it in another shiny show

i used your rhyme, and used your details to create the past version, i added some but the full pictuer was taken from you
so yours was the brilliant one as i said, and consedring that this is your first try "rhyming" i really raise my hat to your talent

although .. it's not fair to put mine beside yours
cuz it's a known result challenge

but i know .. u didn't mean it

i didn't mean to make a comparison, but saying its not fair is not acceptable. you have a talent and everyone praised your topic
and the way you made your lines was stupendous, i did mine to make a full picture of past and present, you can say its one way trip, so comparing mine with yours isn't the object, what matters most is how the full picture can be recognized through the audience

sure
i'm
^_*
it's a big proud for me .. to have such a nice comment like that
u just ... made me fall in love with poems
i thank u over millions ... sir

Parise be to Allah, i hope i was helpful to you, and all i have to say is just believe in yourself, you have the talent, and you have the knowledge, just keep writing poems and other stuff, but try not to force yourself, just write, and the words will seep as a waterfall, then re-read again and see the full picture, once its been created - publish it and see the feedback. fyi, don't wait people to praise your work, once your are fully satisfied then people will recognize you, but if you excpect all people to agree that your topic is like no other then i guarantee that you'll stop at one point and you'll fail to make any progress - anyway its easy to manipulate words while ryhming, so try always to use new way of writing and read poems and memorize them, then you'll see a brilliant progress showed up


Anyway, brilliat first try sis, hope that won't stop, just keep writing ^_^d

[Smasem]

There are some mistakes ... but
generally
it's great
I mean , describing a bad station in your life
I mean you raised an problem
and then you found the solution for it
^^
Way to go

[النجم السامي]

GOOD LUKE..

[keko]

though I was just passing by, and I had NO INTENTIONS of replaying or comment on any thing
BUT , those words dragged me deep that I lived the moment
I'd like to wish you a splendid future