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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : ~&~Waiting for a Friend~&~



V@mpire~Girl
11-6-2010, 10:39 PM
Hi all

How are you? I hope all of you are all right

This is my first topic in this Forum and the MSOMS Forum



~&~Waiting for a Friend~&~


In a dark night
I sit near a gloomy lake
No one know about me
I sit and think
There is something missing
Many questions come in my mind
Why do I feel lonely?
Why does the tree look sad?
I see my reflection in the lake
And I saw myself
Feeling lonely and sad
Suddenly the rain has fell
I sit under the tree
I don’t know what to do
Or where to go
I cry and cry
Without hope or help
Thinking of giving up
Is the best way
Then someone come near me
And stretch his hand
I raise my head and hold her hand
She said for me:”come on my friend let’s go"
The rain stop and the lake shine
With little stars that are dancing in the sky
I realize then I miss an important thing
Which is a friend



I hope you like it and your Criticism is very important


^^

omeratta
12-6-2010, 10:51 AM
thnx for all thing ...

i hope comin the more

Eva
14-6-2010, 10:40 PM
http://www.cute-factor.com/images/smilies/princess_yvonne/2553540988719525087.gif

Very nice poem .. I like it !

http://www.cute-factor.com/images/smilies/ali/ali_109.gif
Eva

Nice Nurse
17-6-2010, 12:51 AM
Hello sister V@mpire~Girl ^_^
I liked your words thank you
best wishes

mohbaboo
17-6-2010, 09:31 PM
Peace

first of all
I congratulate you for these amazing and sincere words

I was wondering what would you do after all the crying
but then, I knew that life is full of hope
and all what we need is to have faith in Allah
and leave it all to him and do what we're supposed to do

there are few language errors
if you want, I will provide you the correction

and you can use the help before you publish your work in this thread
here
∫∫.» طلبات مراجعة المواضيع قبل طرحها . Preposting Revision Requests «.∫∫ (http://www.msoms-anime.net/showthread.php?t=130780)

thank and hope to see more of your touching works

MB

اخر شيء
30-9-2010, 07:18 PM
Really touching words
T___T
At first I thought its a sad poem, but when I reached the end, I was provided with hope
Life isn't gloomy
we just need to look at the bright side

Thanks for sharing it with us
and as Mohbaboo said
there are some language errors
Good luck >.<=b