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23-09-2009, 04:43 AM
the Assassin

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hey fellows
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long time no c
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well, how ur eid is going
hope ur doing great
but i'm kinda wondering where is my GODDAMN sweet
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jss kiddin'

anyway, i have written this poem long time back
its been dedicaded to someone which was
the main reason of who i am " after Allah's Blessings Ic-Graduate0 "d

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As I walk to tha book of my memories,
I re-collected my sadness and tears
I set down reminiscin' and hold the truth
Tha painful reality that I can't loath
The soreness that make my heart addicted
Even though I didn't choose to be selected
All of a sudden I heard an echo callin'
Wake me up from my loneliness and scarin'
U r not alone , look at the shiny star..
Don't be sad even if I'm too far
Cos if you realy believe in tha name of love..
To see the shiny star from far above,
Even if u tried and can't catch it..
Just wipe ur eyes and imagine it

I'm done

Ur comments Amigos
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23-09-2009, 04:45 AM
the Assassin

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btw, avoide grammar stuff bcoz its dusty
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23-09-2009, 04:59 AM
لحن العذاب

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eid soooooo good
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اقتباس:

As I walk to tha book of my memories,
I re-collected my sadness and tears

remember me of me sometimesicon115

Very nice poem

keep going
23-09-2009, 05:11 AM
Rainbow Star

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sooooooooo good
I'm beginnig to love poetry
your writing is so nice

please post some more
more
more
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23-09-2009, 05:23 PM
the Assassin

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thanks for passing by girls
but plz what do u think about it
its old, and i have been improved since then

do you all see deffrience of my writtings or
its just mere imaginations
23-09-2009, 08:30 PM
Rainbow Star

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you improved in the grammar definitly

but i don't know much about poetry so it's hard to say

i think wanderer expresses more feelings in a more touching way

I hope you improve even more
^_^
23-09-2009, 09:05 PM
the Assassin

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woah... that was outlandish
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aregatow onee-chan
08-11-2009, 03:45 PM
بنــ كيوت ــوتة

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thank you so much
good luck with future english

دودو
08-11-2009, 07:50 PM
Schwert

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******PBUY******
Hello friendly friend, how have u been^ ^, it's really marvelous topic with this fantastic poem and it's beneficial for me too
thanks abundle my friend and show us more in the future, c u around

not: what's meaning of Amigos :^ ^1
09-11-2009, 02:22 PM
the Assassin

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اقتباس:

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Saber

not: what's meaning of Amigos :^ ^1

thanx everyone for passing and u bro saber
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about amigo, it means man, friend, in mexican
iCon944
23-11-2009, 03:51 AM
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a nice
&
fantastic poem

^^u are a best man