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Hello my dear brothers and sisters

Today, we have something new, or an old idea with some new stuff in it as you might say

We are going to make our own short stories in this topic by combining our ideas together
and sharing them with everyone

:This way of making stories could have many benefits such as
Adapting your ideas to the ones before you, making new idea out of no where as the events decide which way you are going to take the story

Let's see the rules, or how this works



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Instructions and rules

You can participate by completing the previous parts and writing up to 5 sentences each time as a maximum or two as a minimum
nothing more than 5 or less than 2

Example 1
He ran away from the wolf << one sentence

Example 2
,He said upon seeing his mother
"?Mother, how are you"
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these two lines are one sentence

Don't write two comments in a row except when 24 hours pass on the last comment, then write the second comments

If two members wrote at the same time, we take the first one, and I will delete the second later

Be careful not to ruin the story by writing unexpected sudden turn of events which might not seem to fit in the story, as the type of the story should be considered

You can read this guide for more information on writing short stories
☆The Second Guide. The complete Guide to Writing Short Stories☆

The most important rule is, you must include the previous comment in your comments so when someone wants to read the story, they go to the last comment to read it all, not to every comment which can be troublesome and you should make your part in a different color

Example
mohbaboo
In an ancient time, there was a boy. His name was Ahmed. He grew up in a poor house

Azuma
In an acient time, there was a boy. His name was Ahmed. He grew up in a poor house. His father was a hardworking farmer who was raised in a family of farmers. His name was Asem

black fox
In an acient time, there was a boy. His name was Ahmed. He grew up in a poor house. His father was a hardworking farmer who was raised in a family of farmers. His name was Asem. His mother, on the other hand, came from a rich family which abandoned her for marrying a poor farmer... etc
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^
and so on
if you didn't do so, your comment will not be part of the story (will be deleted) and the next member can ignore it

Remember to pay attention to the tense of the story, as it should be the same, usually in the past simple tense
just follow the first sentences

The forum's general rules applies, and any comment that crosses the rules shall be deleted and the writer will be penalized


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?When to start a new paragraph

Learning how to break your stories into paragraphs is confusing but an important job. New paragraphs are important for the reader. They tell when you're switching time, place, topic or speaker, and they help break the page up so it is not just a solid block of writing.l

There are a few standard times to make a new paragraph:l
When you start in on a new topic
When you skip to a new time
When you skip to a new place
When a new person begins to speak
When you want to produce a dramatic effect

We will try to make short stories
So, there is no need to learn how to divide the story into chapters which is important in long stories or novels
and not here



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Part 1
Note: don't forget to copy this part before writing the second one

Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l

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Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a dijetal game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty.0











mohbaboo , what a great and a useful idea that you shared with us

I have nothing to say but thanks

thanx a lot of your works

nice part ^_^
very dramatic XD

Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

A week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l




Note: to make sure there isn't any spelling mistakes, you can write your part in microsoft word and then copy it here

Guys, it's OK to make mistakes as long as we finish the story. We will revise it, edit it, and finally publish it. So, step up

You don't have be great at story writing, but you need imagination and some basic knowledge in past tenses

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Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

A week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l A huge swimming pool which was very wonderful. He didn`t imagine that one day he will discover that this old fenced yard contains of something amazing like this. And this is what he said loudly: "amazing". The man turned to see who came, and when he saw that the visitor was Sami, he smiled and welcomed him. Sami asked him: who are you? You are not from this city, and there is no house here in this yard but lots of long trees. The man was still smiling when he asked him again: " i`m sorry but what are you doing here, I see other sport halls. 0






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ur opinion ^^

Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

A week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l A huge swimming pool which was very wonderful. He didn`t imagine that one day he will discover that this old fenced yard contains of something amazing like this. And this is what he said loudly: "amazing". The man turned to see who came, and when he saw that the visitor was Sami, he smiled and welcomed him. Sami asked him: who are you? You are not from this city, and there is no house here in this yard but lots of long trees. The man was still smiling when he asked him again: " i`m sorry but what are you doing here, I see other sport halls.
"Nothing has changed!" said the old man and looked around. Sami got confused and looked around too. "What do you mean grandpa?" wondered Sami and came closer to the old man. With a smile, the old man pointed to the other sport halls which seemed very old and said "I used to play here with my friends; O… really the place is still the same but got older!". He walked towards the swimming pool and said "Because we were very poor, we used to hang out here and there and finally come secretly to this place to swim especially in the night when all were sleeping".0

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Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

A week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l A huge swimming pool which was very wonderful. He didn`t imagine that one day he will discover that this old fenced yard contains of something amazing like this. And this is what he said loudly: "amazing". The man turned to see who came, and when he saw that the visitor was Sami, he smiled and welcomed him. Sami asked him: who are you? You are not from this city, and there is no house here in this yard but lots of long trees. The man was still smiling when he asked him again: " i`m sorry but what are you doing here, I see other sport halls.
"Nothing has changed!" said the old man and looked around. Sami got confused and looked around too. "What do you mean grandpa?" wondered Sami and came closer to the old man. With a smile, the old man pointed to the other sport halls which seemed very old and said "I used to play here with my friends; O… really the place is still the same but got older!". He walked towards the swimming pool and said "Because we were very poor, we used to hang out here and there and finally come secretly to this place to swim especially in the night when all were sleeping". "Now it will be yours in this city" said the old man. 0

In fact, he was a business man who had bought that fenced yard from the heirs of the owner to restore his memories and to turn it to a sport place which everyone could play and had fun with a very cheap price. he renewed it and added cafe, cinema, Pizza Store, small restaurant, Video Games Store and book store especially for short stories. He planted different kinds of flowers and trimmed the long trees to be tidy. He asked Sami if he knows some people without jobs or even poor to employ them. Sami got a perfect idea . 0

What a big fenced yard loool


Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

A week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l A huge swimming pool which was very wonderful. He didn`t imagine that one day he will discover that this old fenced yard contains of something amazing like this. And this is what he said loudly: "amazing". The man turned to see who came, and when he saw that the visitor was Sami, he smiled and welcomed him. Sami asked him: who are you? You are not from this city, and there is no house here in this yard but lots of long trees. The man was still smiling when he asked him again: " i`m sorry but what are you doing here, I see other sport halls.
"Nothing has changed!" said the old man and looked around. Sami got confused and looked around too. "What do you mean grandpa?" wondered Sami and came closer to the old man. With a smile, the old man pointed to the other sport halls which seemed very old and said "I used to play here with my friends; O… really the place is still the same but got older!". He walked towards the swimming pool and said "Because we were very poor, we used to hang out here and there and finally come secretly to this place to swim especially in the night when all were sleeping". "Now it will be yours in this city" said the old man. 0

In fact, he was a business man who had bought that fenced yard from the heirs of the owner to restore his memories and to turn it to a sport place which everyone could play and had fun with a very cheap price. he renewed it and added cafe, cinema, Pizza Store, small restaurant, Video Games Store and book store especially for short stories. He planted different kinds of flowers and trimmed the long trees to be tidy. He asked Sami if he knows some people without jobs or even poor to employ them. Sami got a perfect idea . He mentioned his football-fanatic friends who usually played with him, and how their love for sport and football brought them together regardless their class and differences. "they can make use of their love to sport to help, as well as earning some decent money, especially for me to help my family', said Sami with a big smile on his face. The old man laughed with nostalgia in his eyes remembering what it means to be young and enthusiastic. He agreed to put the idea for a test, but with one condition. Their families should agree first.l

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The old man laughed with nostalgia in his eyes remembering what it means to be young and enthusiastic

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Hey guys , that is pretty good work

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Azuma
In an acient time, there was a boy. His name was Ahmed. He grew up in a poor house. His father was a hardworking farmer who was raised in a family of farmers. His name was Asem

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I don't remembe writing that part ^^
any way I saw some grammer mistakes if you wish to correct them that would be perfect than later .

I will come later to add some frozen particon79

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I don't remembe writing that part ^^
any way I saw some grammer mistakes if you wish to correct them that would be perfect than later

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I was planning to leave them until we finish the story and edit it as a whole
but feel free to edit them if you want

We will do a full editing later anyways

I want to write the next part, but I'll wait a little bit longer

here we are

ooooo Once upon a time, There was a poor boy named Sami. He was an ordinary 12 years old boy who liked to play football with his friends. His friends were from middle class families which provided them with many games and toys that Sami's parents couldn't. So, playing football was the only thing they had in common with him which they can enjoy together.l One day, while they were playing football, one of his friends Kicked the ball highly , so it fell into a high fenced yard which its gate was closed . Sami climbed the fence and then jumped carefully . He kicked the ball out to his friends and climbed the fence again to go out. Suddenly, when he reached the top, his feet stumbled and fell down. 3 hours later,he Woke up from a short coma to find a big surprise, his leg had broken . His friends came to visit him and brought a gift, a new model on a digital game. But in an Unexpected reaction, he refused the gift because his brothers didn`t have a game and that will make his father sad of his Poverty. Sami had in his mind that he is the elder brother of his two little ones, Nadi and Ahmed, and he should act upon that and never be selfish.l

oooooA week later, after Sami got back to school and started walking again, he passed on his way back home by that fenced yard in which he broke his leg. He was surprised to see that the gate was open, so he peeked from outside curiously. Outside the in-house, there was an old man reading a magazine. That would normal, except that the thing that drew Sami's attention wasn't the man himself, but the thing that was beside him.l A huge swimming pool which was very wonderful. He didn`t imagine that one day he will discover that this old fenced yard contains of something amazing like this. And this is what he said loudly: "amazing". The man turned to see who came, and when he saw that the visitor was Sami, he smiled and welcomed him. Sami asked him: who are you? You are not from this city, and there is no house here in this yard but lots of long trees. The man was still smiling when he asked him again: " i`m sorry but what are you doing here, I see other sport halls.l

"oooooNothing has changed!" said the old man and looked around. Sami got confused and looked around too. "What do you mean grandpa?" wondered Sami and came closer to the old man. With a smile, the old man pointed to the other sport halls which seemed very old and said "I used to play here with my friends; O… really the place is still the same but got older!". He walked towards the swimming pool and said "Because we were very poor, we used to hang out here and there and finally come secretly to this place to swim especially in the night when all were sleeping"."Now it will be yours in this city" said the old man. 0

oooooIn fact, he was a business man who had bought that fenced yard from the heirs of the owner to restore his memories and to turn it to a sport place which everyone could play and had fun with a very cheap price. he renewed it and added cafe, cinema, Pizza Store, small restaurant, Video Games Store and book store especially for short stories. He planted different kinds of flowers and trimmed the long trees to be tidy. He asked Sami if he knows some people without jobs or even poor to employ them. Sami got a perfect idea . He mentioned his football-fanatic friends who usually played with him, and how their love for sport and football brought them together regardless their class and differences. "they can make use of their love to sport to help, as well as earning some decent money, especially for me to help my family', said Sami with a big smile on his face. The old man laughed with nostalgia in his eyes remembering what it means to be young and enthusiastic. He agreed to put the idea for a test, but with one condition. Their families should agree first.l


ooooo " Father, father" screamed Sami as soon as he arrived home to tell him about the new jobs. "He is still in the car workshop, and why do you screaming, shame on you, your younger brothers will learn from you every thing, try to be more quiet" his mother answered. He apologized and ran fast to his father where he works and told him the whole story. " I found another job for you and for me, too " that what was he said immediatley. "We will discuss this at home" his father said with a warm look and smile, " go home, help your mother in preparing the dinner, think carefully about this job and wait me. " Ok, dad, I will", Sami answered and left happily.l



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come on guys

let`s complete this story