I know that my reply here is too late. And I truely apologize for that
:nosweat:I got too busy lately and kinda forgot about the story.
Hiiii Dragonier >> glad to see ur reply
To tell u the truth I thought that u REALLY forgot about the story
But thank god u've remembered hhhhhhhhh
I know u r busy so I won't blame u even if u forgot in the future
At the same time it would show me how effective my story is
To be honest, Your way of writing has improved alot since the last part
The vocabulary attracted my attention. You used such strong words
:cool21: explain and discribe some sitiuations and events.
Thanx for telling me >> it is good to hear it
The story has developed in many ways. The way you discribed Kyoko's mother
character was great. It truely showed how kind she is, although she seemed
;)a bit strict at the beginning. You did a great job in that

The way Kyo acted, in a confused way :flex:, really showed the danger of the
sitiuation. It really helps the reader in imaging Kyo's feeling at that time
and the cold he felt inside that freezing room
I really wanted to read comments about the character>> thanx for that
And it is true I wanted the reader to have sort of feeling about the situation
All of them, Kyo, Kyoko and their mother where holding to a straw
to find a way to get out of that room. I kinda imagind the coldness they
felt in that fridge-like room
It is good that I could make u have the feeling
And I really LOVED ur first sentence >> it is is really describing the situation
And by the way I'm giving descriptions of the characters in an indirect way
I mean that I'm not giving u description paragraph about Kyo; how does he look, his age, his hair and his clothes
I'm giving certain description for certain situation so I hope u got that
I've given a little description about Kyo and Kyoko
But for Yukiko I haven't yet >> I'll try in the coming chapter
And I want to mention that I've drawn the characters long time ago but I haven't shown that bcuz I don't want to destroy the image in readers' imagination
So what do u think about that?
I know you were looking for a longer reply, but that's all I thought
about for the mean time
Well I hope I could a long reply but I'm really happy with this one
And thanx a lot for ur concern
I am looking forward to the next part of the story
So please, don't stop writing. It would be a great loss for us
:sadwalk:if you gave up on completing the stroy

Finally.. Keep up your good work and NEVER give up. Eventually you will be a great writer Kurosagi
Thank u sooo much for ur encouragement >> I'll try my best
But since I'm really busy I haven't been writing
Inshallah I'll write in the first chance I would get
And I always tell myself
Give up… NEVER
Hope to hear from u soon
Jaicon12