اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Kurosagi مشاهدة المشاركة
hi there detective_girl


sorry for ur brother, inshallah men ahl el janna
about ur writing; first let me say that I'm not a good writer
to give u a really good comments
but I'll tell u my opinion

ur writing skills is good, but needs to improve of course
u r able to express ur feelings.
so in order to improve I have two seggesion
Try reading novels, poems and also magazines
I think if ur writing were more like poems it would be great
also ask someone u know who is expert or skilled in english
about ur witing, let him or her shows u ur mistakes
or alternative sentences
I'm sure u'll learn

that's all and sorry for not giving u any critic

GooD LuCk
hi

thanks for passing by and giving me yr opinion
actually i read alot of novels but lately i stopped :nosweat:
i don't have anyone to read what i'm writing that's why i put it in here to let you guys read it and give me yr opinion

thanks again