The Empty House

[Rainbow Star]

hello everyone

this is another story from the same old file

haha
it's short becuz it was suposed to be a composition
okay
it's not as good as he first one though
but I'd like to hear your thoughts

so here we go

The Empty House

Once there was a man who bought a new house in the country and wanted to live there with his dog. The house next to his was a big empty house that looked very old.

One day he didn't find his dog, so he went out looking for him. While he was looking he suddenly heard it's barking. It was coming out of the empty house. He walked to the house. When he got there, he started looking for the dog. at last he found him in the library. His dog looked different. He tried to take it back with him but the dog wouldn't. the man suddenly heard a voice, but there wasn't anyone besides him in the house. He was frightened. He ran out and everyday he tried to take the dog home.

One day the dog was again in the library. the man looked at the books. they were all covered in dust except for ONE at that moment the dog jumped and threw the book down. the man took the book and opened it. He read a story of a man who lived alone in this house, but the man was killed and nobody knew he died. his body was found long after he died. the book says his spirit stayed at the house looking fo it's killer. the man closed the book because his dog barked. he looked at it. He saw a face of a man on the dog's face. he threw the book at it, screamed and ran away. He was frightened. He left his house at the same time and never came back.
since that day nobody visited the house and people say the dog lived there FOREVER!.





so what do you think? is it good




I'm waiting for your comments




bye

[موديا1992]

hello .. !

hhhhhhhhhh , i might not sleep tonight


first time i read the tittle of topic i thought there is a frightened something
will be inside & your story says that ,
So .. the story isn't short , it's micro story , lol

After that , I'll never enter big empty houses ^_^




But ... Good Job
I like the idea ^_^ !
keep going !











Mudia

[Hajime-san]

saaaaluuuuuuuuuuuut
alors sa roule ici huhuhu
u're great sis
with a simple idea with a few of lignes u make a nice story
i like your way really
u attracted the attention of the reader
waaaaaw
like the first story looooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
really when i remember it i can't stop laughing
like Mudia - san said good job
i think that i'll like this old file huhuhuhaaay
ok now give your stories
about me i'm waiting
.
thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaanks
.
take care of this old file and u of course lool

[Blue $tar]

Hi Rainbow
,,
I like digging in my old staff
I find things that are so precious
to me,,heh
,,
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another story
I liked it.it's kinda mysterious
I like this type of stories,

??can I ask you something
??why don't you write longer stories
I think it's gonna be soo good
you can put more events,and staff
masha2Allah you have a talent

keep writing girl

,,
C YA

[Rainbow Star]

wow
really? it's good? YaY
that makes me happy ^_^

blue star

I never thought about writing long ones
becuz those were only composition
but i might try that

thanx

[rikku]

ur story was lovely

i couldn't help thinking.... why didn't the old man possess the man instead of
the dog, but then there wouldn't b that part where the dog throws the
book... and i loved that part


so how about the next time u pull smth out of that old file u write a new of
version of the same theme and post them both.... that should b interesting

[Rainbow Star]

nice idea Rikku-chan

I will think about it
thank u

[doki heart]

yo
my chan
i like your story
what a fuuny ^^

surely coool
my miss
^^keep going

onygayyyyyy
i love everything about this stuff

[Rainbow Star]

Hi doki
haha
I'll try

I also like these stuff
thanks for reading

by the way
I love your signature