!!My gift!!

[أسمـــاء]

Hello
my friends
how are you ??

tody i have written some words
for my first time in my life
..................................

it will be as a gift especially for
our supervisor ,my lovely team
and my dear friends

When i went away
to that shining way

Me and no one except me
Sitting beneath a tree
Leaving that thoughts of me
Flying and dancing like a bee

The sky smiled for I
Became that cute butterfly
Brightly and nicely received me
Bowing saying sure.. Hi

I passed and looked around
When I suddenly got charmed
Blessings.. mercies I found
That I suppose it might
Be that immortal land

Deeply and further there
I walked following the light
Seeking more beauty and bright
Going to endless site

A voice was totally true
Whispering ... saying ..it is you
....no tears ...no fear be sure
There would be no more blue
Or pain you might be through
It is .. heaven and no other clue
It's heaven and no other clue

i imagined myself leaving this life to the afterlife
where there were nothing except happiness

i hope you love it
!!!!!!!
give me your opinion

[قمر الكون]

thanks for the nice words
keep forward

[kyto kid]

Hello

my friends
how are you ??

Hi Azuma i am fine thanks

When i went away
to that shining way

Me and no one except me
Sitting beneath a tree
Leaving that thoughts of me
Flying and dancing like a bee

The sky smiled for I
Became that cute butterfly
Brightly and nicely received me
Bowing saying sure.. Hi

I passed and looked around
When I suddenly got charmed
Blessings.. mercies I found
That I suppose it might
Be that immortal land

Deeply and further there
I walked following the light
Seeking more beauty and bright
Going to endless site

A voice was totally true
Whispering ... saying ..it is you
....no tears ...no fear be sure
There would be no more blue
Or pain you might be through
It is .. heaven and no other clue
It's heaven and no other clue

i imagined myself leaving this life to the afterlife
where there were nothing except happiness

i hope you love it
!!!!!!!

give me your opinion

You asked for my opinion ok be ready


your words are awesome really and you know i feel that i live these words when i read it ,,you give words life by your wonderful describtion and really with out lie although i feel boring these days coz of exams but your words enter some happiness into my heart

There would be no more blue
Or pain you might be through
It is .. heaven and no other clue
It's heaven and no other clue

nice end from you i like it and you are right there is no pain but only for good people who will go to paradise and we all hope to be like those people

this truthful words Azuma and really thanks again

[Schwert]

welcome my sister Azuma, how are you my sisater, I read ur theme and I like it very very much. in fact some times we cann't express on our feelings for somethings that happened with us because the words cann't do that, I like the intent of this poem it'sbeautiful intents and indeed I'm not good in expression
therefore I shall say thanks my sister for ur nice topic, it's really admired me and peace be upon youA_A

[maxman1991]

Azuma

how r u??

oky....

from your way of write express you would be a really good writer if you continue ...
but you need to use more affect able words or expressions ...
what you wrote is really nice and make the reader happy in some way

anyway keep writing don`t stop you are a good writer but you must write more
and remember describing people or things make you write good

I hope I wasn`t an annoying person but all what I said is only for you

i imagined myself leaving this life to the afterlife
where there were nothing except happiness

i hope you love it
!!!!!!!

And I hope it well be happiness moment for all of us

and yes I like it


happy day

[أسمـــاء]

You asked for my opinion ok be ready


your words are awesome really and you know i feel that i live these words when i read it ,,you give words life by your wonderful describtion and really with out lie although i feel boring these days coz of exams but your words enter some happiness into my heart

Hi there Sir Kyto
an honor you visited my topic
and you really delight me by your comment
Thanks God that my words make you happy
i was imagining that unknown life there in heaven while what found there will exceed our imagination really....we hope all to live that real life and to be in paradise inshalla

~~~~~
Do your best nee-sama
in exams ... and best wishes
we all encourage our novalist


thanks again
good luck

[أسمـــاء]

welcome my sister Azuma, how are you my sisater, I read ur theme and I like it very very much. in fact some times we cann't express on our feelings for somethings that happened with us because the words cann't do that, I like the intent of this poem it'sbeautiful intents and indeed I'm not good in expression
therefore I shall say thanks my sister for ur nice topic, it's really admired me and peace be upon youA_A

Hi brother Coaf
Thanks i am fine
that's very kind of you
thanks for your sweet reply.. it means a lot to me and encourage me ,too
but i did not experenced that ^_^
i just imagened
really i am happy that you like it, i knew i am low level ,still i will practice to present something nice for you dear friends
................................
it's an honor brother
see you ^_^

[the Assassin]

hummm u said this is the first time
^^
i'll kill u though ..
u know being a writer is a simple thing
and moving to another step will be some
kinda hard.. anyways.. i liked ur words
but the issue is .. u follow the sequence
and then u went to another word...
let me show u something

you
sure
^^
i think u foced on the sequence
but next time i think u gonna
blow our heads clean off ^^

about the poem .. its one of the
best things i've ever read
^^
aregatow onee-chan

[أسمـــاء]

Azuma

how r u??

oky....

from your way of write express you would be a really good writer if you continue ...
but you need to use more affect able words or expressions ...
what you wrote is really nice and make the reader happy in some way

anyway keep writing don`t stop you are a good writer but you must write more
and remember describing people or things make you write good

I hope I wasn`t an annoying person but all what I said is only for you

And I hope it well be happiness moment for all of us

and yes I like it

happy day

thanks
i am fine
........
No No No
you are'nt bothering me at all

otherwise i would be happy to guid me
thanks for your words
i know am just a little thing in English world
and im gonna practice until i die
but i do not want English to cause my death somehow
...........................................
i know how description affects your writing and this needs someone has vast imagination
to make him creat something has not been created befor

thanks for your visiting
what you've just done encourages me
.....................
by the way .... i am excited to see your writings

[أسمـــاء]

hummm u said this is the first time

^^
i'll kill u though ..
u know being a writer is a simple thing
and moving to another step will be some
kinda hard.. anyways.. i liked ur words
but the issue is .. u follow the sequence
and then u went to another word...
let me show u something

you
sure
^^
i think u foced on the sequence
but next time i think u gonna
blow our heads clean off ^^

about the poem .. its one of the
best things i've ever read
^^
aregatow onee-chan

Hi brother
thanks for your visiting
and your encouraging as well
immmmm..... i know i am young in this field and
Yes it is my first time to write a complete poem

But..
i will practice
Thanks again

[maxman1991]

you are'nt bothering me at all

^^

by the way .... i am excited to see your writings

see my last articles they have one of mine
}}an advertisement for my subject^^

by

[cutie#1]

Amazing Very wonderful masha' allah ~ Please write more & more

Hope that i'll be like you 1 day ,, God bliss you ,, so for now ,, see you later

=)

[N@Y]

thanks for these fantastic words ^_^

[dallo]

HEY AZUMA

ITS REALLY GOOD WORDS FOR THE FIRST TIME

I LOVE IT ACTULLY

I WANNA SEE MORE FROM U FREIND

SEE YA SOON INSHALLAH

JANA

[Hajime-san]

very touching words...or they kill me..thanks..thanks
really so nice
don't be late for the next one..ok sis
Best luck

[أسمـــاء]

N@Y

Thanks brother for visiting ^^
Allah bless you


dallo

Hi lady and sososos sorry for being late^^
thanks for your sweet words ^^
they support me ,too
Allah bless you dear sister ^^
am trying my best
thanks

Hajime-san

Thanks brother
that's very kind of you
am glad you left a comment
Mellion thanks and it's an honor that you like them
hontony arigato
i'll do my best
Allah bless you brother^^


see u around

Azuma^_*

[the miri dude]

hi AZUMA
i gust want to thank u for this great words
u have alot of talent....use it well

[أسمـــاء]

I will...
Do not worry
likewise you..^_^
Thanks alot...brother...