ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته
peace be upon every one , and may Allah bless you
how is life going here ?
I ask Allah help and guide every one to the right way in the life
...
they are moments . when we can't go on anymore
even we use our final breath
but
no breath is gonna come out for our sake
..
Yeah , I am writing right now because in any moment I am gonna make loud boom
I gathered my emotions , ideas , and my body
to think together ... how we can face those troubles
but no thing comes yet an isolation
lol ... what a crabby long intro
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In an isolation , only a single sound , tick , tack , tock
Piles of dust everywhere , sneaking into my breath
And no single sign but , a sigh with , tick , tack , tock
A transparent melody got through my dry eyes
Made them shed tears , and I ain't I
Everything was upside down for a while
Again wind spread its dust with a , tick , tack , tock rhyme
From where ?I shouted screamingly
My ears couldn't bear or hear a sad melody
Isolation __ Silence __ Horrify
The tick , tack , tock raised badly
More closure , more ... till I
Caught its head but I
Cried loudly for its hurting side
Bit by bit I heard by my ears tick , tack , tock
It was so near , yet I was so deaf
Every single thing stopped for my dear
A blooded house thumping bimp , bamp , bomp
For its isolation ,,,it was only a heart with tick , tack , tock
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....
ah ... relieved
hmmm you might say there is something wrong with this girl , or ... how nonsense all of this
:)
An isolation ... it's a best place to be for moments ... to be with your own ... to think how will you go on
it's only a place for a break .... to continue life
: )
S A L A M
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رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
Peace be upon you my dear Naro-chan
What a fabulous lines you've wrote
The "tick, tack, tock" really grabbed my attention
I was wondering where does this sound come from and
at the end it was only..... ^^ kinda relieved
Such wonderful words from an amazing poetess =)
Only one line which confused me
Caught uts head but I
I wonder, what does "uts" mean? or is it a typo? ^__^
Hoping to see more from you
Keep up going forward
Good luck >.<=b
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة اخر شيء
Peace be upon you my dear Naro-chan
What a fabulous lines you've wrote
The "tick, tack, tock" really grabbed my attention
I was wondering where does this sound come from and
at the end it was only..... ^^ kinda relieved
Such wonderful words from an amazing poetess =)
Only one line which confused me
Caught uts head but I
I wonder, what does "uts" mean? or is it a typo? ^__^
Hoping to see more from you
Keep up going forward
Good luck >.<=b
lol
be in this state and just work your all sense
so even you can't hear anything
you gonna create this sound
and (uts) lol ... sorry
this the keyboard mistake
not me
i'll fix it now
: )
thnx 4 commenting hny
HG
and thnx alot for eveyone press on thnx button
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
amazing
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
but, I know one thing
I believe the feelings from withing the words had reached us
.
.
.
with a BOOM
thank you a lot
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
السلام عليكم ورحمة اللهـ وبركاتهـ
pretty good
even thought I did not read it completely
but I notice a little mistake at comments
اقتباس:
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
U can rephrase this clause like this
I can't express how I felt when I'd read this piece
^_^
sorry about that
but I can't pass a mistake without correct it << big liar
for your knowledge , there's a lot of mistakes in this section
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة mohbaboo
amazing
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
but, I know one thing
I believe the feelings from withing the words had reached us
.
.
.
with a BOOM
thank you a lot
lol
after every silence ... gonna be BOOM
lol
thnx brother alot for this nice comment
: )
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
اقتباس:
السلام عليكم ورحمة اللهـ وبركاتهـ
و عليكم السلام و رحمة الله تعالى و بركاته
thnx a lot
اقتباس:
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
U can rephrase this clause like this
I can't express how I felt when I'd read this piece
lol ... i bet you don't know the Adverbial Modifying Phrase technique
lol
in which you change the full clause into a phrase
so the 1st is true
and yours is true
اقتباس:
for your knowledge , there's a lot of mistakes in this section
c'mon ... we all learners ... and all are human btw
:)
thanx for ur nice critical comment
have a nice day
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
I can't express how I felt when I'd read this piece
I can't express how I felt when I was reading this piece
I can't express how I felt while I was reading this piece
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
^^^^
there's nothing wrong with each one of them
all of them are correct depending on specific aspects in the writer's mind
sorry Naro-chan
but, I had to clarify this
thanks again
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة mohbaboo
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
I can't express how I felt when I'd read this piece
I can't express how I felt when I was reading this piece
I can't express how I felt while I was reading this piece
I can't express how I felt reading this piece
^^^^
there's nothing wrong with each one of them
all of them are correct depending on specific aspects in the writer's mind
sorry Naro-chan
but, I had to clarify this
thanks again
lol ... i miss grammar days
it's okay brother
the most important thing is to get the right information
btw i mentioned the name of this rule above
: )
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
يآآآآه ، آسف جزيلاً على الملاحظة الخطأ
I Don't know why I'm very stupid to get involved with mohbaboo
I'm playin' with the wrong man << like they said
•♦•♦•♦•♦•
I can't express how I felt reading u're posts
I'm very sorry Guys
and , I have to be more carefull next time
AND U " NARUTO_CHAN"
U piss me off , this is the 1st time I heard about it ;] z
at all , a new iformation added to my grammers dictionary
by the way , what does " btw " mean ? x
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
GRRRR
I am gonna all banana
my name isn't
" NARUTO_CHAN"
but Naro-chan
^^""
انسانة نرجسية : )
from Ghost Hunt
...
okay it's okay anyway
the most you get right information the most you gonna be better in Languages
...
btw : by the way
: )
hope to see you around more
رد: ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ I.:.So .:.Lay.:.Shin ҳ̸Ҳ̸ҳ
tich tich tich
can i be in ??o
if u wrote this song while isolaysion .. then it'll be fact
that .. the islaysion makes talent
they say .. the best moments when u be among people & friends
but i say ..the best of the best .. is to be with my own
isolaysion is another world for me
i can say .. time of silence .. time of relax.. time of meditation
....
time for my self
>>>>>
naro- chun
thanks for reminding me with the small cave i have forgetten
between concerns of life