Lone soul in Two Worlds

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First of all, “Lone Soul in Two Worlds”…such a nice title which grabbed my attention

heh thanks , though I wasn't sure about it and sisy didn't like it

I like your way of describing how the daylight was and the thoughts of remembering the dead. You combined the sentences amazingly well

Yeah may be I'm having some problems in description
It's like I want to fully transform the picture I saw to your mind and so was forced to use as many adj as possible , hope you get it well.

The best part was when you said, “even if I die, the clock will keep tick ticking…” I recalled a poem, forgot its name ^^; , when the poet said nothing had changed since his friend’s death. Still the girl sings and people work. The sun will rise and the world will continue on leaving nothing behind which can show that someone is no more

Even more excited to read the poem ,if I'm not asking too much u might bring it ^_^
thanks sis I was glad by your visiting and next time tell me the weakness in my text
Claire you say ^^
when I wasn't able to understand her when speaking with Leon ...now it's all cleeeeeeear ^_^
may be we miss childhood
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mohbaboo waiting for your feed back bro
thanks

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Yeah may be I'm having some problems in description
It's like I want to fully transform the picture I saw to your mind and so was forced to use as many adj as possible , hope you get it well.

Yeah, I fully got it!
No one said anything about your description. You did good in everything ^o^=b

Even more excited to read the poem ,if I'm not asking too much u might bring it ^_^
thanks sis I was glad by your visiting and next time tell me the weakness in my text

I wish I know the name of the poem. I have to search through piles of books and papers to
find it ^^;
And weakness? I must apologize to declare...I haven't found any weakness!!
Frankly speaking, you write very well. Although you have some mistakes, you know Gr errors and such, but
comparing to the story you send to me, your writing is getting even better.

Don't let anything hold you back from writing. wishing for you all the best~