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coma'n ...you're arguing about the story
that makes me even more excited
to read it ^^
I would like to say (Teacher rather than Last thing)
but dear sis I'm really thankful that your'e eager to read the chapters I've done once
soon you will come with (so boring I couldn't even finish it )g
but even though ,
your welcome
Ah I knew it T^Tاقتباس:
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I should fix this spot
>/////<اقتباس:
so ... the style is okay and a man should read the words more and more to analysis what he read
because he is infront of a stunning story-righter
^^""
Haha you know, many critics said that the main character of the story is a male
I was surprised. How many times did I mention "she"
but they were right in one thing. The female character doesn't have a name ;;>__>
Sorry for misunderstandingاقتباس:
but ... i was so surprised to know that all is from your own
i meant ... that i should be myself for a while to understand more about the story cuz ... T____T things are mixed together right now ^____^
or as " up - side - down " xD it's a name of a traditional food here in Sham
I know that your busy with translating mangas, your education, life and such
but please do bear with the confusion ^^;
I like stories with these kinds of confusion. It brings amusement =)
Sham, huh? I never knew this info. "upside-down" and FOOD, I'll search for the recipe and make it
one day...
Glad to read your comments every now and then
Good luck managing your work and reading the story
^__^=b
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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Azuma
Do read it. I'm eager to see your comment and point of view about it
I am honored to read your story. You don't know. A person to person differاقتباس:
I would like to say (Teacher rather than Last thing)
but dear sis I'm really thankful that your'e eager to read the chapters I've done once
soon you will come with (so boring I couldn't even finish it )g
but even though ,
your welcome
maybe I'll like it =)
If you don't mind, send it to me or post it so I can read it
I'm trying my best to reach 50posts so I can send msgs. ah its so difficult
I'm amazed how many of you reached 100posts
Your all are amazing *-*
It's been written since a considerable time
so don't mind gaps , mistakes and silly plot
and focus on the language
Here you are
I've already read the first two chapters and I must say
Its wonderful. Your way of describing is amazing
I'll make sure to give you a long comment when i finish reading it
For now
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chapter 5 had been added in the first reply
Enjoy
T___T
at ch4 i thought i am gonna shed tears no wonder , but hardly i bear that ...
but in ch5 i cried nd cried oooooh T^T"""
lemme start from dat
oooh a long sigh -____-""
one of sentences that stole my mind for a moment ... yeah , if this so to human being in general ... a man can't believe anything but what he sees real in front of himself ....اقتباس:
“You human beings only believe what you se-…”
Al-Hamdu lellah I am A Muslim who believe in Allah
back to the topic ^^"""
the missing word " see " yeah he seems like he disrupt you as he is very sure of his speech
... and then the conflict within herself began to raise ... is she a real believer ???
but the moment of commenting mistakes also came ... you see something you're not suppose to see ...
and then ... T_T you are NOT any more a chosen ... you returned to be a human ... but a different one from before
ah ... i was so eager to know what she has seen ... what was that !!
even my tears dropped ... but she didn't so ... that's hurts more and more
then when she said " my heart hurts " i could feel the catastrophe that's happened to her
she who is now ... what she will do and the sake for whom
but the most hurting and shocking things ... now she knows ... she knows how the real is ... ugly and dark
why should we live in lies ??? why ???
why ppl do lie to each other ... why almost believe in lies rather reality
ah ... even this extremely tragic ... yet it's nice
i realize who wise you ARE ...
ah ... i am gonna miss this story a lot
it shouldn't be here alone ... show it to the world
ps ...
if my poetry instructor shouts at me cuz i didn't read Sir Philip Sidney's A litany .... what i should say to him rather i was reading a more interesting story ...
and last thing about " up side down " you can find it as its Arabic name
" المقلوبة "
lol ,,, the English name isn't its ... but my lol teacher was joking and translated it like that
best of best
and may Allah bless you in every path in your life hny
salam
O__o the first one to cryاقتباس:
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*hugs* your making me cry now
Tears of happiness for having a GREAT reader and for the long comments TT____TT
That's what materialistic people always love to say especially when you get intoاقتباس:
one of sentences that stole my mind for a moment ... yeah , if this so to human being in general ... a man can't believe anything but what he sees real in front of himself ....
Al-Hamdu lellah I am A Muslim who believe in Allah
discussions with them
All I have to say is that they're contradicting themselves
She disengaged herself from being one of them just by uttering this sentence "YOU human beings"اقتباس:
the missing word " see " yeah he seems like he disrupt you as he is very sure of his speech
... and then the conflict within herself began to raise ... is she a real believer ???
Her heart is like a puzzle =)
Rather than getting back as a human being, your stuck in betweenاقتباس:
but the moment of commenting mistakes also came ... you see something you're not suppose to see ...
and then ... T_T you are NOT any more a chosen ... you returned to be a human ... but a different one from before
ah ... i was so eager to know what she has seen ... what was that !!
She was treated as the Chosen which is more closely of being an angel
Its impossible for her to return back as a human being after living as a holy creature for a long time
She is in her own dilemmaاقتباس:
i could feel the catastrophe that's happened to her
she who is now ... what she will do and the sake for whom
1-Reality is stranger than fictionاقتباس:
why should we live in lies ??? why ???
why ppl do lie to each other ... why almost believe in lies rather reality
2-Reality hurts
3-The light of the reality in some aspect is too bright that can't be seen
That's what I think is the answer for the question stated above ^^;;
^///^ thanks for complimenting meاقتباس:
ah ... even this extremely tragic ... yet it's nice
i realize who wise you ARE ...
I have reached this level because of your comments and criticism
Remember this "Behind a good writer is an amazing readers~"
Not this storyاقتباس:
ah ... i am gonna miss this story a lot
it shouldn't be here alone ... show it to the world
If you read the story "The Lottery", you'll get what I meant
Read what they said about the story
Haha, you'll get a sever punishmentاقتباس:
ps ...
if my poetry instructor shouts at me cuz i didn't read Sir Philip Sidney's A litany .... what i should say to him rather i was reading a more interesting story ...
Well, it happened to me once. My students instead of preparing for the next lesson or revising the
previous one, they were preparing the lesson for another subject.
It really hurts to see your students bored from your lectures T^T
So it wasn't called as "upside down". I was really shocked when I first heard the name
Now it makes sense ^^;
Thanks Naro-chan for this wonderful feast
You filled my ravenous appetite
I'm full now xD
BTW, how old are you? I'm really curious to know
Hello again , congratulations for having the end displayed over here icon31
I have finished reading your story but not quite sure of getting everything and here is what i thought of it:
The story seems to be written by Good English writer who were highly inspired by stories he read before , things he has watched as well as great deal of experiences in life which is the greatest element behind showing this story .
To be honest , from the first glance I took at your story , it feels like it would be kinda of fantasy and myth , but I believed you wanted to drew our attention to sth symbolic hidden among your lines.
While I was shocked to read (purifying from sins , fly to lord and such, these christen aspects has nothing to do with the real meanings of your story ...it's just like the story is wearing a western appearance but the core is yours
Let's come to the end which I was waiting for , It's also sad but yet happy .
I mean ..isn't the moment when some body realized that all what he dedicated his life for was just a lie is considered as something pleasing and happy moment
what I mean is awakening from the darkness of lies to the light of truth is quite painful but worthy even compared to that pain or more!
for that reason I'm saying it's happy
The language is of someone professional masha'alla (I honestly like it )
the description , the wonderings of her at last is all admirable
I can only say that at the first three chapters you viewed an idea and kept describing it over and over in which you could have turned the light to something else like other characters or sth from your creativity. and there is some misspelled words
...
That's all my dear
well done . and do your best in the new coming stories
^^and do not forget that I'm waiting a full criticism about mine
Good Luck
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lol ... last thing ... you are a teacher after all ^^""" how ++++ no comment lol
who knows ... may be i am gonna end with teaching after all -___-"""
lol ... doworry i am happy right now ^^""اقتباس:
O__o the first one to cry
*hugs* your making me cry now
Tears of happiness for having a GREAT reader and for the long comments TT____TT
the hugs from you ? lol
oh that's a lot don't mention that ... it's my honor to read and analysis with you
ah that's true ... but in the real life ppl love lies over truthاقتباس:
1-Reality is stranger than fiction
2-Reality hurts
3-The light of the reality in some aspect is too bright that can't be seen
That's what I think is the answer for the question stated above
that's reminds me of " the theory of the cave " by Plato c'mon you are very smart to include such a thing like this
my congrats to u and ur mind too
...
looool ... i did something so so so near to the theme in ur fictionاقتباس:
Haha, you'll get a sever punishment
Well, it happened to me once. My students instead of preparing for the next lesson or revising the
previous one, they were preparing the lesson for another subject.
It really hurts to see your students bored from your lectures T^T
guess what hh
we have to write a daily report about every class
so today i read mine and it was ... hhhhhh the truth
i said to him i didn't understand a word from you
he was happy for being so honest ...
^^""
ah ><""
i can't say anything about teaching ... cuz i am a student right now
you should try it ... ^^""اقتباس:
So it wasn't called as "upside down". I was really shocked when I first heard the name
Now it makes sense ^^;
you are welcome ...اقتباس:
Thanks Naro-chan for this wonderful feast
You filled my ravenous appetite
I'm full now xD
BTW, how old are you? I'm really curious to know
even i will repeat my first thank in my first post here .... to that thing lol
thnkx alot
btw i am around 20 ... not young not old
^^"""
i will wait for another work from you ... don't forget i am waiting
Allah with you
The end?اقتباس:
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My story didn't end. There are 2 chapters left
I'm at dead end in chapter 7 -____-
And you are an amazing reader and also a writerاقتباس:
The story seems to be written by Good English writer who were highly inspired by stories she read before , things she has watched as well as great deal of experiences in life which is the greatest element behind showing this story .
Thanks for the nice words. I really appreciate it so much
BINGO!!!اقتباس:
To be honest , from the first glance I took at your story , it feels like it would be kinda of fantasy and myth , but I believed you wanted to drew our attention to sth symbolic hidden among your lines.
While I was shocked to read (purifying from sins , fly to lord and such, these christen aspects has nothing to do with the real meanings of your story ...it's just like the story is wearing a western appearance but the core is yours
I never meant it to have any Christian aspects. It was directed for something else
which I wish you as my readers to figure out
First of all, its not the ending. I'm sorry to disappoint you ^^;اقتباس:
Let's come to the end which I was waiting for , It's also sad but yet happy .
I mean ..isn't the moment when some body realized that all what he dedicated his life for was just a lie is considered as something pleasing and happy moment
what I mean is awakening from the darkness of lies to the light of truth is quite painful but worthy even compared to that pain or more!
for that reason I'm saying it's happy
You'll be reading 2 more chapters
I don't like ending my stories just by realizing
And I agree with you on the happy ending, that is if it really ended here with chapter 5 ^^;
Thanks, merci, arigatou and Shukria for the nice words ^///^اقتباس:
The language is of someone professional masha'alla (I honestly like it )
the description , the wonderings of her at last is all admirable
I feel flattered
Is it the word "week". If so then yeah I did a mistakeاقتباس:
and there is some misspelled words
It was supposed to be "weak". Sorry for that. I'll correct it
If there are others, please tell me
I will after I finish it and re-read it againاقتباس:
do not forget that I'm waiting a full criticism about mine
Thanks for commenting and spending your time to read my story
Huh? so does that mean you didn't believe I was a teacher up until now?اقتباس:
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And no comment, huh?
Stand up!
lol teacher student relationship ^__~
Some students hate to be told to stand up in the middle of the lesson even if they were the ones at wrong
I know of another way to make them behave well instead of standing up
Anyway, Insha'Allah you'll become a teacher soon and together, you and I, can share our
sad and happy moments =)
The honor is all mine, my lady~اقتباس:
it's my honor to read and analysis with you
Hmm never read this theory. I'll check on itاقتباس:
that's reminds me of " the theory of the cave " by Plato c'mon you are very smart to include such a thing like this
Not even a word?اقتباس:
we have to write a daily report about every class
so today i read mine and it was ... hhhhhh the truth
i said to him i didn't understand a word from you
he was happy for being so honest ... ^^""
I understand his feelings. He must be in agony right now
Its true that honestly is a nice thing, but it hurts
Our students are our responsibilities....wait this seems a cool sentence
I might begin writing a story about students and teachers
Yeah a wonderful idea. Thanks Naro-chan =)
You gave me a magnificent plot for my next next story
I wonder what that thing is....so suspicious <__< >__>اقتباس:
even i will repeat my first thank in my first post here .... to that thing lol
I wonder more on why do you refuse telling me
Ara? kawaii...such a young girlاقتباس:
btw i am around 20 ... not young not old
I'll try my best to complete my new story. Now I'm at chapter 3اقتباس:
i will wait for another work from you ... don't forget i am waiting
Allah with you
and I have a hunch that I'll give up middle way
Thanks to all who commented and read my story even without posting a comment
and thanks for sending me msgs. I'm sorry I can't reply to them
I'm trying my best to stick here and post till I reach the specific amount of posts
so I can reply to you all
Please bear with me and my sad, gloomy stories ^^;
It's Ok , No bothering at all
I'de rather become more excited to know what will come next
It just feels like an ending and like everything was cleared up
.......
waiting for your real end ^^
Thanks for waiting and also for keeping on readingاقتباس:
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I hope the ending won't disappoint you
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Chapter 6 has been added
Sorry I had lots of trouble
PS. I'll be absent for days
Insha'Allah I'll finish chapter 7 and also the last chapter soon
The final chapter of the story has been added
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Chapter 7
I see people got bored a lil with it
I don't blame you. I'm the one who's stalling after all -___-
sorry for the long story
Hope you'll enjoy reading it
ahhh
i thought it has finished yet i am wrong as usual
two new chapters ^^" ahhh
but that's good news anyway
i read the 6th chapter first
so can you let me comment as usual ?
a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?
^^"""
okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter
in the 1st chapter there was this conversation
now i can understand why she answers in that way
a person who has lost every thing and does not have any thing
...
but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking
...
a last thing
i am not calling you ;)
doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being
okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA
so long
last thing
NAROOOO-CHAN!!~ been a long time
How have you been? how's uni and life there?
I was planning on making it contain of 8 chapters or maybe 9اقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan
but somehow I ended it with only 7 chapters
You don't know how sad I was when I realized I'm at the end
^^; sounds strange, huh, but please bear with me
I was referring the Chosen as a black dotاقتباس:
a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?
Everyone has a dark and bright side, ne? but when the dark side overcomes the bright side
what happns?
He was anonymous at first and even though I wanted to identify him, but I ended up making himاقتباس:
okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter
a stranger till the end. I failed in this =___=
As for why, its because she looked like her daughter and for another reason...
Which is what I intentionally didn't tell because from the first beginning I wanted
to make a side story where you can read his own story and what happened exactly
from his own point of view.
Yeah, I'm still writing
Rather than embarrassed, I'd say stubbornness.اقتباس:
but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking
You know how it feels when you know that you took the wrong choice and ended up
being stalked by a strange person who wants to see you down or even defeated
over what you chose...
How would you feel? will you show him your weakness? or will you even put that
break like impression on your face?
I doubt anyone will. And sometimes the shock of learning the truth can lead you to hallucination.
To fight the entire town people is difficult. In the end
she had to ask for help.
Haha, you see how popular my name is. I bet everyone in this forum called meاقتباس:
a last thing
i am not calling you ;)
well once in their life....
That's my second failure...I didn't described enough about her family memberاقتباس:
doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being
but yeah, her father rarely cares about her
What's "atm"? what's "isA"?اقتباس:
okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA
Insha'Allah you'll like the ending. If not do tell me the negative points and
I'll try to change it and make the story even better
Don't hold your tongue sweety ~.^
Hope to see you soon
hi hi ... lastyyاقتباس:
NAROOOO-CHAN!!~ been a long time
How have you been? how's uni and life there?
i am fine ... Alhmdule Allah
and you : ) ??
lol ... cuz i am talking Eng at my facebook ... we used to use short forms of wordsاقتباس:
What's "atm"? what's "isA"?
atm : at the/this moment
isA : in sha' Allah
^^"" crazy , do we ? hh
okay i read the last part
T____T
it's a nice story , indeed
he in the last ... Sacrifices his life in the sake of her
to live in hopes like any man ( human being ) who wanna live
i don't have a lot to say
but ... through her experience i can say ... she was suffering a lot
being a chosen is only a fake false hope
... she realizes the truth too late
so there should be
Sacrifices
..
i am so touched
thanks a lot my sis last thing whose name is very famous
... a last thing
be aware am not calling you
... two days ago ... a poetry teacher said he spent 2 years in searching about his Ph.D topic which was about writing as a woman '
he said every one was shocked about the result that a woman can write better than men even better T. S. Eliot
^^
NOW I can believe him
keep writing and i will cheer for you
isA
^^""
with my best wishes :) to u
Glad to see your doing wellاقتباس:
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Same here, plus I've caught a cold =____=
Heeh, facebook. What's your name there? you must give me!اقتباس:
lol ... cuz i am talking Eng at my facebook ... we used to use short forms of words
How did you concluded that he sacrificed himself? I didn't say thatاقتباس:
he in the last ... Sacrifices his life in the sake of her
All I said is that they waited for him, but he didn't show up
Lol, I did hear this, but till now I doubt itاقتباس:
... two days ago ... a poetry teacher said he spent 2 years in searching about his Ph.D topic which was about writing as a woman '
he said every one was shocked about the result that a woman can write better than men even better T. S. Eliot
^^
NOW I can believe him
Compared to Joseph Conrad, I'm no match of him
I wish to write novels the way he do
Thanks for commenting and cheering me up
Its an honor to have a reader like you
I wish for you too best of luck in this life and the hereafter
Good luck Naro-chan
oh . get healthy soonاقتباس:
Same here, plus I've caught a cold =____=
^^
lolاقتباس:
Heeh, facebook. What's your name there? you must give me!
my real name of course
^^"" guess what
okay i'll send you if you wanna
hmm , i think so cuz , he was about to help herاقتباس:
How did you concluded that he sacrificed himself? I didn't say that
All I said is that they waited for him, but he didn't show up
he pretend to be the chosen instead of her ? i remember i read that lol
so i said that
may be
or may be not
pardon me ... doing the research paper makes the one hallucinate
^^""
ah ... i forget to put " my " before a poet teacherاقتباس:
Lol, I did hear this, but till now I doubt it
Compared to Joseph Conrad, I'm no match of him
I wish to write novels the way he do
... but believe me you deserve best of best
^^"""
Awww thanksاقتباس:
المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Naro-chan
Hmm your real name. Masaka....Bu-اقتباس:
okay i'll send you if you wanna
I won't jump to conclusions. Send it, onegaishimasu~
Sugoi! Sugoi yo!اقتباس:
hmm , i think so cuz , he was about to help her
he pretend to be the chosen instead of her ? i remember i read that lol
so i said that
T^T *sniff* I'm sooooooo lucky to have someone like you
You understood it without me saying it. I'm so proud of you TT^TT