A Black Dot in the Ocean

[Naro-chan]

ahhh
i thought it has finished yet i am wrong as usual
two new chapters ^^" ahhh

but that's good news anyway
i read the 6th chapter first


so can you let me comment as usual ?

a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?

^^"""
okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter

in the 1st chapter there was this conversation
now i can understand why she answers in that way
a person who has lost every thing and does not have any thing
...
but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking
...
a last thing
i am not calling you ;)
doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being


okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA

so long
last thing

[اخر شيء]

NAROOOO-CHAN!!~ been a long time
How have you been? how's uni and life there?

ahhh
i thought it has finished yet i am wrong as usual
two new chapters ^^" ahhh

I was planning on making it contain of 8 chapters or maybe 9
but somehow I ended it with only 7 chapters
You don't know how sad I was when I realized I'm at the end
^^; sounds strange, huh, but please bear with me

a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?

I was referring the Chosen as a black dot
Everyone has a dark and bright side, ne? but when the dark side overcomes the bright side
what happns?

okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter

He was anonymous at first and even though I wanted to identify him, but I ended up making him
a stranger till the end. I failed in this =___=
As for why, its because she looked like her daughter and for another reason...
Which is what I intentionally didn't tell because from the first beginning I wanted
to make a side story where you can read his own story and what happened exactly
from his own point of view.
Yeah, I'm still writing

but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking

Rather than embarrassed, I'd say stubbornness.
You know how it feels when you know that you took the wrong choice and ended up
being stalked by a strange person who wants to see you down or even defeated
over what you chose...
How would you feel? will you show him your weakness? or will you even put that
break like impression on your face?
I doubt anyone will. And sometimes the shock of learning the truth can lead you to hallucination.
To fight the entire town people is difficult. In the end
she had to ask for help.

a last thing
i am not calling you ;)

Haha, you see how popular my name is. I bet everyone in this forum called me
well once in their life....

doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being

That's my second failure...I didn't described enough about her family member
but yeah, her father rarely cares about her

okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA

What's "atm"? what's "isA"?
Insha'Allah you'll like the ending. If not do tell me the negative points and
I'll try to change it and make the story even better
Don't hold your tongue sweety ~.^
Hope to see you soon