A Black Dot in the Ocean

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coma'n ...you're arguing about the story
that makes me even more excited
to read it ^^
I would like to say (Teacher rather than Last thing)
but dear sis I'm really thankful that your'e eager to read the chapters I've done once
soon you will come with (so boring I couldn't even finish it )g
but even though ,
your welcome

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lol
to start from what you have ended with ^^""
description
ah yeah ... may be in the 1st and 2nd ones there is a lack of infomation
but to me it's alright after that
cuz ... this is the writer ideology to write

Ah I knew it T^T
I should fix this spot

so ... the style is okay and a man should read the words more and more to analysis what he read
because he is infront of a stunning story-righter
^^""

>/////<
Haha you know, many critics said that the main character of the story is a male
I was surprised. How many times did I mention "she"
but they were right in one thing. The female character doesn't have a name ;;>__>

but ... i was so surprised to know that all is from your own
i meant ... that i should be myself for a while to understand more about the story cuz ... T____T things are mixed together right now ^____^
or as " up - side - down " xD it's a name of a traditional food here in Sham

Sorry for misunderstanding
I know that your busy with translating mangas, your education, life and such
but please do bear with the confusion ^^;
I like stories with these kinds of confusion. It brings amusement =)
Sham, huh? I never knew this info. "upside-down" and FOOD, I'll search for the recipe and make it
one day...

Glad to read your comments every now and then
Good luck managing your work and reading the story
^__^=b

coma'n ...you're arguing about the story
that makes me even more excited
to read it ^^

Do read it. I'm eager to see your comment and point of view about it

I would like to say (Teacher rather than Last thing)
but dear sis I'm really thankful that your'e eager to read the chapters I've done once
soon you will come with (so boring I couldn't even finish it )g
but even though ,
your welcome

I am honored to read your story. You don't know. A person to person differ
maybe I'll like it =)
If you don't mind, send it to me or post it so I can read it
I'm trying my best to reach 50posts so I can send msgs. ah its so difficult
I'm amazed how many of you reached 100posts
Your all are amazing *-*

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It's been written since a considerable time
so don't mind gaps , mistakes and silly plot
and focus on the language
Here you are

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I've already read the first two chapters and I must say
Its wonderful. Your way of describing is amazing
I'll make sure to give you a long comment when i finish reading it

For now



chapter 5 had been added in the first reply
Enjoy

[Naro-chan]

T___T
at ch4 i thought i am gonna shed tears no wonder , but hardly i bear that ...
but in ch5 i cried nd cried oooooh T^T"""

lemme start from dat
oooh a long sigh -____-""

“You human beings only believe what you se-…”

one of sentences that stole my mind for a moment ... yeah , if this so to human being in general ... a man can't believe anything but what he sees real in front of himself ....
Al-Hamdu lellah I am A Muslim who believe in Allah


back to the topic ^^"""

the missing word " see " yeah he seems like he disrupt you as he is very sure of his speech
... and then the conflict within herself began to raise ... is she a real believer ???

but the moment of commenting mistakes also came ... you see something you're not suppose to see ...
and then ... T_T you are NOT any more a chosen ... you returned to be a human ... but a different one from before
ah ... i was so eager to know what she has seen ... what was that !!
even my tears dropped ... but she didn't so ... that's hurts more and more

then when she said " my heart hurts " i could feel the catastrophe that's happened to her
she who is now ... what she will do and the sake for whom


but the most hurting and shocking things ... now she knows ... she knows how the real is ... ugly and dark
why should we live in lies ??? why ???
why ppl do lie to each other ... why almost believe in lies rather reality

ah ... even this extremely tragic ... yet it's nice
i realize who wise you ARE ...
ah ... i am gonna miss this story a lot
it shouldn't be here alone ... show it to the world

ps ...
if my poetry instructor shouts at me cuz i didn't read Sir Philip Sidney's A litany .... what i should say to him rather i was reading a more interesting story ...

and last thing about " up side down " you can find it as its Arabic name
" المقلوبة "
lol ,,, the English name isn't its ... but my lol teacher was joking and translated it like that

best of best
and may Allah bless you in every path in your life hny
salam

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T___T
at ch4 i thought i am gonna shed tears no wonder , but hardly i bear that ...
but in ch5 i cried nd cried oooooh T^T"""

O__o the first one to cry
*hugs* your making me cry now
Tears of happiness for having a GREAT reader and for the long comments TT____TT

one of sentences that stole my mind for a moment ... yeah , if this so to human being in general ... a man can't believe anything but what he sees real in front of himself ....
Al-Hamdu lellah I am A Muslim who believe in Allah

That's what materialistic people always love to say especially when you get into
discussions with them
All I have to say is that they're contradicting themselves

the missing word " see " yeah he seems like he disrupt you as he is very sure of his speech
... and then the conflict within herself began to raise ... is she a real believer ???

She disengaged herself from being one of them just by uttering this sentence "YOU human beings"
Her heart is like a puzzle =)

but the moment of commenting mistakes also came ... you see something you're not suppose to see ...
and then ... T_T you are NOT any more a chosen ... you returned to be a human ... but a different one from before
ah ... i was so eager to know what she has seen ... what was that !!

Rather than getting back as a human being, your stuck in between
She was treated as the Chosen which is more closely of being an angel
Its impossible for her to return back as a human being after living as a holy creature for a long time

i could feel the catastrophe that's happened to her
she who is now ... what she will do and the sake for whom

She is in her own dilemma

why should we live in lies ??? why ???
why ppl do lie to each other ... why almost believe in lies rather reality

1-Reality is stranger than fiction
2-Reality hurts
3-The light of the reality in some aspect is too bright that can't be seen
That's what I think is the answer for the question stated above ^^;;

ah ... even this extremely tragic ... yet it's nice
i realize who wise you ARE ...

^///^ thanks for complimenting me
I have reached this level because of your comments and criticism
Remember this "Behind a good writer is an amazing readers~"

ah ... i am gonna miss this story a lot
it shouldn't be here alone ... show it to the world

Not this story
If you read the story "The Lottery", you'll get what I meant
Read what they said about the story

ps ...
if my poetry instructor shouts at me cuz i didn't read Sir Philip Sidney's A litany .... what i should say to him rather i was reading a more interesting story ...

Haha, you'll get a sever punishment
Well, it happened to me once. My students instead of preparing for the next lesson or revising the
previous one, they were preparing the lesson for another subject.
It really hurts to see your students bored from your lectures T^T

So it wasn't called as "upside down". I was really shocked when I first heard the name
Now it makes sense ^^;

Thanks Naro-chan for this wonderful feast
You filled my ravenous appetite
I'm full now xD
BTW, how old are you? I'm really curious to know

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Hello again , congratulations for having the end displayed over here
I have finished reading your story but not quite sure of getting everything and here is what i thought of it:


The story seems to be written by Good English writer who were highly inspired by stories he read before , things he has watched as well as great deal of experiences in life which is the greatest element behind showing this story .
To be honest , from the first glance I took at your story , it feels like it would be kinda of fantasy and myth , but I believed you wanted to drew our attention to sth symbolic hidden among your lines.
While I was shocked to read (purifying from sins , fly to lord and such, these christen aspects has nothing to do with the real meanings of your story ...it's just like the story is wearing a western appearance but the core is yours

Let's come to the end which I was waiting for , It's also sad but yet happy .
I mean ..isn't the moment when some body realized that all what he dedicated his life for was just a lie is considered as something pleasing and happy moment
what I mean is awakening from the darkness of lies to the light of truth is quite painful but worthy even compared to that pain or more!
for that reason I'm saying it's happy

The language is of someone professional masha'alla (I honestly like it )
the description , the wonderings of her at last is all admirable
I can only say that at the first three chapters you viewed an idea and kept describing it over and over in which you could have turned the light to something else like other characters or sth from your creativity. and there is some misspelled words

...
That's all my dear
well done . and do your best in the new coming stories
^^and do not forget that I'm waiting a full criticism about mine
Good Luck

[Naro-chan]

lol ... last thing ... you are a teacher after all ^^""" how ++++ no comment lol
who knows ... may be i am gonna end with teaching after all -___-"""

O__o the first one to cry
*hugs* your making me cry now
Tears of happiness for having a GREAT reader and for the long comments TT____TT

lol ... doworry i am happy right now ^^""
the hugs from you ? lol
oh that's a lot don't mention that ... it's my honor to read and analysis with you

1-Reality is stranger than fiction
2-Reality hurts
3-The light of the reality in some aspect is too bright that can't be seen
That's what I think is the answer for the question stated above

ah that's true ... but in the real life ppl love lies over truth
that's reminds me of " the theory of the cave " by Plato c'mon you are very smart to include such a thing like this
my congrats to u and ur mind too
...

Haha, you'll get a sever punishment
Well, it happened to me once. My students instead of preparing for the next lesson or revising the
previous one, they were preparing the lesson for another subject.
It really hurts to see your students bored from your lectures T^T

looool ... i did something so so so near to the theme in ur fiction
guess what hh
we have to write a daily report about every class
so today i read mine and it was ... hhhhhh the truth
i said to him i didn't understand a word from you
he was happy for being so honest ...
^^""
ah ><""
i can't say anything about teaching ... cuz i am a student right now

So it wasn't called as "upside down". I was really shocked when I first heard the name
Now it makes sense ^^;

you should try it ... ^^""

Thanks Naro-chan for this wonderful feast
You filled my ravenous appetite
I'm full now xD
BTW, how old are you? I'm really curious to know

you are welcome ...
even i will repeat my first thank in my first post here .... to that thing lol
thnkx alot
btw i am around 20 ... not young not old
^^"""

i will wait for another work from you ... don't forget i am waiting
Allah with you

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Hello again , congratulations for having the end displayed over here

The end?
My story didn't end. There are 2 chapters left
I'm at dead end in chapter 7 -____-

The story seems to be written by Good English writer who were highly inspired by stories she read before , things she has watched as well as great deal of experiences in life which is the greatest element behind showing this story .

And you are an amazing reader and also a writer
Thanks for the nice words. I really appreciate it so much

To be honest , from the first glance I took at your story , it feels like it would be kinda of fantasy and myth , but I believed you wanted to drew our attention to sth symbolic hidden among your lines.
While I was shocked to read (purifying from sins , fly to lord and such, these christen aspects has nothing to do with the real meanings of your story ...it's just like the story is wearing a western appearance but the core is yours

BINGO!!!
I never meant it to have any Christian aspects. It was directed for something else
which I wish you as my readers to figure out

Let's come to the end which I was waiting for , It's also sad but yet happy .
I mean ..isn't the moment when some body realized that all what he dedicated his life for was just a lie is considered as something pleasing and happy moment
what I mean is awakening from the darkness of lies to the light of truth is quite painful but worthy even compared to that pain or more!
for that reason I'm saying it's happy

First of all, its not the ending. I'm sorry to disappoint you ^^;
You'll be reading 2 more chapters
I don't like ending my stories just by realizing
And I agree with you on the happy ending, that is if it really ended here with chapter 5 ^^;

The language is of someone professional masha'alla (I honestly like it )
the description , the wonderings of her at last is all admirable

Thanks, merci, arigatou and Shukria for the nice words ^///^
I feel flattered

and there is some misspelled words

Is it the word "week". If so then yeah I did a mistake
It was supposed to be "weak". Sorry for that. I'll correct it
If there are others, please tell me

do not forget that I'm waiting a full criticism about mine

I will after I finish it and re-read it again

Thanks for commenting and spending your time to read my story

lol ... last thing ... you are a teacher after all ^^""" how ++++ no comment lol
who knows ... may be i am gonna end with teaching after all -___-"""

Huh? so does that mean you didn't believe I was a teacher up until now?
And no comment, huh?
Stand up!
lol teacher student relationship ^__~
Some students hate to be told to stand up in the middle of the lesson even if they were the ones at wrong
I know of another way to make them behave well instead of standing up
Anyway, Insha'Allah you'll become a teacher soon and together, you and I, can share our
sad and happy moments =)

it's my honor to read and analysis with you

The honor is all mine, my lady~

that's reminds me of " the theory of the cave " by Plato c'mon you are very smart to include such a thing like this

Hmm never read this theory. I'll check on it

we have to write a daily report about every class
so today i read mine and it was ... hhhhhh the truth
i said to him i didn't understand a word from you
he was happy for being so honest ... ^^""

Not even a word?
I understand his feelings. He must be in agony right now
Its true that honestly is a nice thing, but it hurts
Our students are our responsibilities....wait this seems a cool sentence
I might begin writing a story about students and teachers
Yeah a wonderful idea. Thanks Naro-chan =)
You gave me a magnificent plot for my next next story

even i will repeat my first thank in my first post here .... to that thing lol

I wonder what that thing is....so suspicious <__< >__>
I wonder more on why do you refuse telling me

btw i am around 20 ... not young not old

Ara? kawaii...such a young girl

i will wait for another work from you ... don't forget i am waiting
Allah with you

I'll try my best to complete my new story. Now I'm at chapter 3
and I have a hunch that I'll give up middle way

Thanks to all who commented and read my story even without posting a comment
and thanks for sending me msgs. I'm sorry I can't reply to them
I'm trying my best to stick here and post till I reach the specific amount of posts
so I can reply to you all
Please bear with me and my sad, gloomy stories ^^;

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It's Ok , No bothering at all
I'de rather become more excited to know what will come next
It just feels like an ending and like everything was cleared up

.......
waiting for your real end ^^

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It's Ok , No bothering at all
I'de rather become more excited to know what will come next
It just feels like an ending and like everything was cleared up

.......
waiting for your real end ^^

Thanks for waiting and also for keeping on reading
I hope the ending won't disappoint you



Chapter 6 has been added
Sorry I had lots of trouble
PS. I'll be absent for days
Insha'Allah I'll finish chapter 7 and also the last chapter soon

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The final chapter of the story has been added


Chapter 7

I see people got bored a lil with it
I don't blame you. I'm the one who's stalling after all -___-
sorry for the long story
Hope you'll enjoy reading it

[Naro-chan]

ahhh
i thought it has finished yet i am wrong as usual
two new chapters ^^" ahhh

but that's good news anyway
i read the 6th chapter first


so can you let me comment as usual ?

a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?

^^"""
okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter

in the 1st chapter there was this conversation
now i can understand why she answers in that way
a person who has lost every thing and does not have any thing
...
but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking
...
a last thing
i am not calling you ;)
doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being


okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA

so long
last thing

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NAROOOO-CHAN!!~ been a long time
How have you been? how's uni and life there?

ahhh
i thought it has finished yet i am wrong as usual
two new chapters ^^" ahhh

I was planning on making it contain of 8 chapters or maybe 9
but somehow I ended it with only 7 chapters
You don't know how sad I was when I realized I'm at the end
^^; sounds strange, huh, but please bear with me

a black dot
oooooooh full of symbols
a black dot what does it stand for ?
what it can do ?
in the ocean ? in the world ? in the universe ?

I was referring the Chosen as a black dot
Everyone has a dark and bright side, ne? but when the dark side overcomes the bright side
what happns?

okay ... another repetition ... he came
I remembered asking you ... who is he
now i can realize who is him
that man
who seeks for happiness for her sake
he knows alot about her ... yet he wants to help her
but why ?
is it only because she reminds him of his passed .... some dots ... away daughter

He was anonymous at first and even though I wanted to identify him, but I ended up making him
a stranger till the end. I failed in this =___=
As for why, its because she looked like her daughter and for another reason...
Which is what I intentionally didn't tell because from the first beginning I wanted
to make a side story where you can read his own story and what happened exactly
from his own point of view.
Yeah, I'm still writing

but in a moment why she pretends to be strong ... does she fells embarrassed about her currently state or what ?
then in another moment she changes her mind and gets along with his speaking

Rather than embarrassed, I'd say stubbornness.
You know how it feels when you know that you took the wrong choice and ended up
being stalked by a strange person who wants to see you down or even defeated
over what you chose...
How would you feel? will you show him your weakness? or will you even put that
break like impression on your face?
I doubt anyone will. And sometimes the shock of learning the truth can lead you to hallucination.
To fight the entire town people is difficult. In the end
she had to ask for help.

a last thing
i am not calling you ;)

Haha, you see how popular my name is. I bet everyone in this forum called me
well once in their life....

doesn't she how a father is
?
that's makes me thinking about her childhood and her life in-general when she was a human being

That's my second failure...I didn't described enough about her family member
but yeah, her father rarely cares about her

okay ... i am saying to you salam atm
may be next day i am gonna carry on reading
isA

What's "atm"? what's "isA"?
Insha'Allah you'll like the ending. If not do tell me the negative points and
I'll try to change it and make the story even better
Don't hold your tongue sweety ~.^
Hope to see you soon

[Naro-chan]

NAROOOO-CHAN!!~ been a long time
How have you been? how's uni and life there?

hi hi ... lastyy
i am fine ... Alhmdule Allah
and you : ) ??

What's "atm"? what's "isA"?

lol ... cuz i am talking Eng at my facebook ... we used to use short forms of words
atm : at the/this moment
isA : in sha' Allah
^^"" crazy , do we ? hh

okay i read the last part
T____T
it's a nice story , indeed
he in the last ... Sacrifices his life in the sake of her
to live in hopes like any man ( human being ) who wanna live
i don't have a lot to say
but ... through her experience i can say ... she was suffering a lot
being a chosen is only a fake false hope
... she realizes the truth too late
so there should be
Sacrifices
..
i am so touched
thanks a lot my sis last thing whose name is very famous


... a last thing
be aware am not calling you
... two days ago ... a poetry teacher said he spent 2 years in searching about his Ph.D topic which was about writing as a woman '
he said every one was shocked about the result that a woman can write better than men even better T. S. Eliot
^^
NOW I can believe him

keep writing and i will cheer for you
isA
^^""

with my best wishes to u

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[CENTER]hi hi ... lastyy
i am fine ... Alhmdule Allah
and you : ) ??

Glad to see your doing well
Same here, plus I've caught a cold =____=

lol ... cuz i am talking Eng at my facebook ... we used to use short forms of words

Heeh, facebook. What's your name there? you must give me!

he in the last ... Sacrifices his life in the sake of her

How did you concluded that he sacrificed himself? I didn't say that
All I said is that they waited for him, but he didn't show up

... two days ago ... a poetry teacher said he spent 2 years in searching about his Ph.D topic which was about writing as a woman '
he said every one was shocked about the result that a woman can write better than men even better T. S. Eliot
^^
NOW I can believe him

Lol, I did hear this, but till now I doubt it
Compared to Joseph Conrad, I'm no match of him
I wish to write novels the way he do

Thanks for commenting and cheering me up
Its an honor to have a reader like you
I wish for you too best of luck in this life and the hereafter
Good luck Naro-chan

[Naro-chan]

Same here, plus I've caught a cold =____=

oh . get healthy soon
^^

Heeh, facebook. What's your name there? you must give me!

lol
my real name of course
^^"" guess what
okay i'll send you if you wanna

How did you concluded that he sacrificed himself? I didn't say that
All I said is that they waited for him, but he didn't show up

hmm , i think so cuz , he was about to help her
he pretend to be the chosen instead of her ? i remember i read that lol
so i said that
may be
or may be not
pardon me ... doing the research paper makes the one hallucinate
^^""

Lol, I did hear this, but till now I doubt it
Compared to Joseph Conrad, I'm no match of him
I wish to write novels the way he do

ah ... i forget to put " my " before a poet teacher
... but believe me you deserve best of best

^^"""

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oh . get healthy soon
^^

Awww thanks

okay i'll send you if you wanna

Hmm your real name. Masaka....Bu-
I won't jump to conclusions. Send it, onegaishimasu~

hmm , i think so cuz , he was about to help her
he pretend to be the chosen instead of her ? i remember i read that lol
so i said that

Sugoi! Sugoi yo!
T^T *sniff* I'm sooooooo lucky to have someone like you
You understood it without me saying it. I'm so proud of you TT^TT